my shit, other shit and shit

[gorthok]

here's a fragment of a short story i'm working on that's got a working title of 'space dive'. quite honestly i have no idea how good it is because i don't often show my work to people nor ask opinions. i figured i'd drop it here and see if i got any comments. criticizim is more than welcome or even just a that sucks or that rocks. lemme know, if

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[sgtred]

Who's the chica that doesn't like the dark side?

[gorthok]

some gothic ho the chach hired to write our dialogue. aparently i can't work around her idiocy.