fic: nhl rps: Paid the Price (to live with myself)

[girl_wonder]

Title: Paid the Price (to live with myself)
Author: girl_wonder

Summary: WWII AU. Berlin, 1945.

Fandom: NHL RPS (Dubinsky/Zherdev)

A/N: This is written for cathybites for help_haiti. I am so sorry that it took this long to get written. But! It is just in time to be a birthday present?

Thanks and thanks and thanks to tassosss and spookshowbaby for the beta and support. Much love.

Comments

[cathybites]

okay, I've officially lost count of how many times I've re-read this. and I know I flailed all over you already for it, but OMG I LOVE THIS SO MUCH. I mean, seriously. SERIOUSLY. It's so much more than I had even dreamt it could be, but should've known it would be because you are AMAZING.

Zherdev leaned forward, breath hot and clammy against Brandon's ear. "Kolya."

ldka;ldka;lsdkald I DON'T EVEN. WHAT? It's just so hot and *intimate*.

Shanahan smiled, and suddenly Brandon remembered why they still trusted him, still liked him as he went from Lieutenant to Captain.

EEEEEEE! SHANNY! I love him in this. LOVE. Him and Jagr. but you knew that I would, didn't you? :P

Like once they were alone, doing this, they were the people they were before the war.

There's just something about this. Like, it's not a lot, but it builds this whole scene in my head - or, a series of scenes, really - of what they're like together.

It was just food, and this was just a kiss.Yes. YES. Because, y'know, yes, they're just, but so much more. HEART FOREVER

[girl_wonder]

You have NO IDEA how excited I am that you like it. It was really interesting to write, and I kept hoping it was what you wanted.

Much, much love, hon.

[girl_wonder]

Thank you! The historical accuracy was something I was pretty stressed about, and so I'm glad that worked for you.

Thanks again!

[girl_wonder]

Thank you!

[cradle_song]

Unf! I absolutely love me some war!fic. The hockey fandom really does need more AUs (err. good ones.) and this one was pretty freaking fantastic.

- One thing that I really liked in this fic was the play with languages. I adored how Avery could be just obnoxious enough to piss people off who barely speak his language. You did a great thing with the obvious barrier they really would have had, too: so often people translate "ESL" or what have you to "slow child-speak". But that usually isn't the case: you just get this mangled thing of different languages. A specific example in your story was just right away, Avery knowing just a few words but able to get his meaning across. (God, it's so obvious I'm a language whore, isn't it?) And the proper French location stuff later made me all happy inside. ^_

[girl_wonder]

Thank you so much for your feedback! I really appreciate that you took the time to give me not only what you thought went well but what was jarring for you, too.

Yes, I have to admit one of the reasons this took so long to write was that I kept tripping up on my desire to be historically accurate while knowing for a fact that I couldn't possibly be 100%. If that makes sense. So I'm glad that it worked for you.

Thanks again for the feedback.

[jess_the1]

That was just wow.

[girl_wonder]

Thank you!