FIC - Practice Makes Perfect

[gen50]

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Title (fandom, pairing, challenge#) Practice Makes Perfect, mainly ConradxYuuri, #14 radio-cassette player
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Title: Practice makes PerfectAuthor: Gen50

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[lilyhaydee]

Ok so I'll start with the bad part :
I personnally think that Murata and Anissina would either have set the ending scene to be more discrete, or more public... And I don't think Murata could have refrained from commenting...
Besides the name is Anissina (with an n and no m) and there are problems with tenses
Murata Ken said eagerly that should now let’s Yozak hear this, grabs Anissima and leaves post haste.Conrad is left alone in the room
(I noticed it since it's a problem I get a lot ... and hence I pay a particular attention to it ^^.)

Then for the good part :
You added good ideas of your own.

Maybe it needs some more work ?

(Keep on practicing, I like reading your ideas ^^)

thank you

[gen50]

Thank you.
I'll edit the piece to look for the tense errors.
I guess word didnt catch it - the grammar and spelling check is my only Beta.

Re: thank you

[lilyhaydee]

I like it better that way ^^.

[kis4me2]

lol, ooh, i knew where this was going from the moment he started to record! horribly akward. but i love horribly-akward yuuri ^^ very cute!

[gen50]

thanks.