Villanelle: Memo From The Senior Partners (AtS, rated G)

[gehayi]

I don't know when this became more a writing journal than anything else, but here's something else. This is a villanelle in iambic pentameter.
(I hope that will shorten the lines a bit.)

Comments

[darkbarde]

Awesome but for the (tough to avoid) inverted syntax. Sometimes your meter is off, but that may be pronunciation issues; should "mysteries" have two syllables, for example?

This is a completely neutral question: do you write non-Angel poetry? You know, er, stuff that isn't about a specific TV show or book?

[gehayi]

Sometimes your meter is off, but that may be pronunciation issues; should "mysteries" have two syllables, for example?

Hmmm. Must be a regional pronunciation. I've never heard "mystery" or its plural spoken with anything but two syllables, like this: MISS-tree.

I'll re-work the meter, though. Thanks for telling me.

This is a completely neutral question: do you write non-Angel poetry? You know, er, stuff that isn't about a specific TV show or book?

Yes, I do, but people seem to prefer fanfic stuff online.

[darkbarde]

Definitely regional, I pronounce it with three syllables: mys-ter-y or myst-er-y or something like that. Like I said, it happens, so I figured I'd ask. I always fight about "futile" as trochaic (FYOOT-l) versus spondaic (FYOO-TILE).

Put me in the camp of people who prefer non-fanfic stuff, as long as it isn't a concentration camp. :-D

[sparkfrost]

i like it a lot, i love villanelles, the repetition always drives the point home for me. i really like this one, very sinister. made me shiver. BTW, i like that you write about Angel and Buffy, im a huge fan, and i like seeing other people's perspective on the shows. so you just keep on doing what you're doing...(Strong Bad)

[alliterator]

I never knew one of my favorite poems (Do not go gently into that good night) was a villanelle until now.
Anyway, this is fantastic. The repitition drives home the message that the Senior Partners have something planned, but it never shows more than it has to, never reveals anything (which is exactly what the Senior Partners would do).
And isn't villanelle such an appropriate thing to call it?

[diachrony]

I know my comment's late, but wow! I loved that. Apparently, I love villanelles (didn't realize that's what they are called). This was creepy and chilling and imaginative!