Comments | geekmama: Drabble: 'Disgust in the Afternoon' (J/E

geekmama

Drabble: 'Disgust in the Afternoon' (J/E - PG13)

Jul 05, 2011 19:20

A sequel to Encomium, this one is 130 unbetaed (but hopefully acceptable) words for the current drabble challenge prompt, 'Disgust'. pearlseed, I promise I'm working on your Jack/Harry birthday fic! And florencia7, thank you so much for the virtual picnic basket! Tall ship fans, check out this display of beautiful sterns at Dark Roasted Blend (with references to PotC ( Read more... )

potc fic, jack-elizabeth

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geekmama July 8 2011, 08:10:38 UTC

Thank you so much, what a lovely comment!

hendercats July 6 2011, 21:51:54 UTC

I love it, love that you're writing J/E again (and that your muse seems to be visiting more often again). And I especially love this
a heady mix of revenge and (God help him) blessing
because it's so *right*.

geekmama July 8 2011, 13:38:21 UTC

So glad you're enjoying the J/E, and thank you very much for letting me know. Hope you're having a great summer back there!

ladymora July 8 2011, 07:01:34 UTC

(New linens at the first opportunity. Finest to be had.)

This made me laugh. Thank you!

geekmama July 8 2011, 08:04:01 UTC

*Hugs tight*

hereswith July 8 2011, 17:26:03 UTC

*points upwards* I'm with ladymora, that made me laugh :-) And I also loved this: Like some callow and helplessly priapic boy. He'd known what she was. But then she knew him as well.. Great work, as always!

geekmama July 10 2011, 16:26:39 UTC

Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed this, the humor as well as the angst. (Love that icon of yours, btw. It's a wonderful pic of them together.)

luvvycat July 10 2011, 15:53:17 UTC

Fantastic companion piece to "Encomium" ... the other side of the coin, as it were.

Comparing the two POV's of these pieces, it's funny that each of them feels that, in a way, they've surrendered, ceded control to the other. (You know what they say: this thing's bigger than the both of them! I guess, in their case, it's true!) ;-) Also, the shared perception by both that this "encounter" carries an element of Jack exacting his revenge on Elizabeth for her past misdeeds.

The glint of sleepy eyes; a rueful smile to match his own.

Oh, yes ... she knows she's caught as well! :-)

He strips again, and comes to her, and disgust suddenly seems sacrilege. The word's treasure, pure and simple, silver and gold.

He'd known it all along.Oh, yes, he has known, hasn't he? He said as much to Will, all those years ago in the treasure caves of Isla de Muerta! Known who--and what--she was, from practically their very first meeting. Known her better, perhaps, than her own doting father, or starry-eyed, lovestruck Will ( ... )

geekmama July 10 2011, 16:56:44 UTC

Thank you so much! You've really made my morning with your comments on this pair of drabbles. It's always wonderful when a reader really "gets it", and I truly appreciate the time and effort you put into your comments.