*giggles* awe, thank you! XD *blushes* i'm so happy you enjoyed it. I really thought the RaphxDon part was horrible; but all these lovely reviews are putting me at ease. thank you! *hugs!*
*hug Splinter* Finally!! *got distract by Raph and Donnie* WHOUHOU!!! I'm a bit inarticulate right now because I'm too happy!!^^ That chapter worth the waiting. It seems that Raphael will not be so forgiven. Oh oh! Wonderful chapter.
*grins* yay! yeah, Raph isn't going to be so forgiving. he's more than a little bitter at Splinter for the last decade of his life. I'm happy you liked it :) thanks!
Dude...seriously, you just made my day so much better! Just found out I might have the flu, but screw it! You made me happy with the update! THANK YOU!!!
D= i'm sorry to hear you might be getting sick! gah! no fun! but i'm glad I could at least make you feel a little happier. I hope you feel better soon! :D
This was soo worth the wait! The pictures were adorable! I honestly LOVE the interactions between Don and Raph in the beginning, since sex would be a little awkward, yet still delicious..you wrote it really nicely, honest.
But I have to say my favorite part in this whole thing is Leo getting uber jealous over Raph...
*blushes* thank you. i was sooooooo uncertain about their interaction. there wasn't much talking, and i felt like the smex was a little... eeeh... maybe slow and awkward are the words i'm looking for. but at the same time it needed to be like that. so thank you :) your review definitely soothes that nervousness I felt towards that part in the chapter ^-^`
and I'm glad someone liked Jealous!Leo XD That was a last minute add-on at 3 in the morning, but i thought it'd be cute. I know Mike and Leo's relationship isn't as well grounded as Raph and Don's, so I just wanted to show that there is something there between them. :) thanks for the review! *hugs and snuggles ya!*
I came home from the university, had lunch, and turned on the computer - and discovered that the new chapter was uploaded. At 2pm. (In fact, when I logged on, only part 1 was uploaded, so I was quite on time...) And I was all like: 'Hey, I thought Mel was American? Then why is she updating so early (for being over there)? Oh well.' I didn't get around to reviewing until now, though
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*laughs* you know what's funny? as soon as I posted the first part, i had a fleeting thought of "I wonder if Geaven is already reading this?" XD
and thank you; i'm glad that the smex felt right for the situation. I really was extremely nervous and uncertain if I liked Raph and Don's first time... It's like what you said, it wasn't as hot as it could have been, but it felt right for their first time. :) thank you! XD and Leo and Mikey, awe... Mikey did one of those childish "ME!MEmememe!!!! my turn!!! Pleeeeeease!!!" In my head, so I had to give him and Leo a quick run through - I didn't realize it till you mentioned it, but you're right! It does show that they are more experienced! XD I didn't even think of it that way, i was just doing what I felt the characters would do.
*blushes* that's such a huge compliment... saying that how they are reacting to forgiving Splinter is cannon; wow... *blushes more* thank you. I feel so honored *^-^*
Yay, I'm getting married to Mel! ^^ *dances around*
Ähum, anyway. More things about the chapter, coming to mind after reading it for the 100th time.
In the smex scene, a couple of times, you refer to Don as if he was Raphael's "property". "...as he took his mate... noises his Donnie-boy was making... the length of his Donnie’s leg..." I LIKE this! Raph being possessive is both sweet and sexy at the same time. Please use more of that?
You were quite poetic in a few places as well: "The candles flickered and licked at the air surrounding the three ninjas and casting shadows and light from all angles that caused the very room to appear to dance in the twilight effects of the sleeping world around them. Splinter seemed to flicker in and out with the candlelight, his fur blending with both the warm hue of gold and the inkiness of blackened shadow seamlessly."There was also one part with Don's impressions of Raph, but I can't seem to find it at the moment. I'm tired, it's almost midnight over here and I should go to bed
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~Melissa the Damgel
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I'm a bit inarticulate right now because I'm too happy!!^^ That chapter worth the waiting.
It seems that Raphael will not be so forgiven. Oh oh!
Wonderful chapter.
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But I have to say my favorite part in this whole thing is Leo getting uber jealous over Raph...
*giggles* Seriously, I loved that part!
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and I'm glad someone liked Jealous!Leo XD That was a last minute add-on at 3 in the morning, but i thought it'd be cute. I know Mike and Leo's relationship isn't as well grounded as Raph and Don's, so I just wanted to show that there is something there between them. :) thanks for the review! *hugs and snuggles ya!*
~Melissa the Damgel
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and thank you; i'm glad that the smex felt right for the situation. I really was extremely nervous and uncertain if I liked Raph and Don's first time... It's like what you said, it wasn't as hot as it could have been, but it felt right for their first time. :) thank you! XD and Leo and Mikey, awe... Mikey did one of those childish "ME!MEmememe!!!! my turn!!! Pleeeeeease!!!" In my head, so I had to give him and Leo a quick run through - I didn't realize it till you mentioned it, but you're right! It does show that they are more experienced! XD I didn't even think of it that way, i was just doing what I felt the characters would do.
*blushes* that's such a huge compliment... saying that how they are reacting to forgiving Splinter is cannon; wow... *blushes more* thank you. I feel so honored *^-^*
*giggles* and sure i'll marry ya ;)
~Melissa the Damgel
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Ähum, anyway. More things about the chapter, coming to mind after reading it for the 100th time.
In the smex scene, a couple of times, you refer to Don as if he was Raphael's "property". "...as he took his mate... noises his Donnie-boy was making... the length of his Donnie’s leg..."
I LIKE this! Raph being possessive is both sweet and sexy at the same time. Please use more of that?
You were quite poetic in a few places as well:
"The candles flickered and licked at the air surrounding the three ninjas and casting shadows and light from all angles that caused the very room to appear to dance in the twilight effects of the sleeping world around them. Splinter seemed to flicker in and out with the candlelight, his fur blending with both the warm hue of gold and the inkiness of blackened shadow seamlessly."There was also one part with Don's impressions of Raph, but I can't seem to find it at the moment. I'm tired, it's almost midnight over here and I should go to bed ( ... )
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