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Prompt 171, Stone, "Weighted"

Jun 08, 2012 17:56

Title: Weighted
Author: Tiri
Series: Any
Word Count: 248
Rating: PG
Characters: Edward and Alphonse Elric.
Summary: Edward will never be able to go back to his childhood, as much as he wants to.
Warning: Slightly morbid suggestions.

A/N: I have so much to say about this concept, and yet... word limit, why are you so cruel?

( Pockets full of stones.... )

tirinkadink, prompt 171

Comments 12

halighfataliter June 17 2012, 22:42:07 UTC

Really nice. I like the image of the stone weighted down by his mistakes and the few sentences exchanged between the brothers. That was very touching.

tirinkadink June 18 2012, 03:02:22 UTC

Thank you! I really wanted to use the fact that, with his automail and all, Ed would sink like a stone if he ever wanted to go swimming -- making it a permanent reminder, at least until things are fixed. I'm really glad this got across as well as it seems to have done. And, of course, the bond shared between the brothers is fun to write.