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Apr 18, 2009 18:44

interrupted 7/7 FINAL
Elise
ryan miller/Patrick Lalime
nc17

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interrupted, ryan miller, buffalo sabres

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fic_of_elise April 19 2009, 23:21:51 UTC
i hope the happy place was made better by my little ditty.

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breezy48 April 19 2009, 17:05:13 UTC
*squeall!!!**

Pattyyyy! The voice of reason.

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fic_of_elise April 19 2009, 23:22:17 UTC
patty is awesome!

hehe im glad you enjoyed it, yes?

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mistokath13 April 19 2009, 20:08:13 UTC
:)) finally, some relief for poor Ryan. It's good to see that Patty offered some stability to Ryan when Ryan needed it...I really enjoyed reading this story, and watch the levels of frustration rise for Ryan until he was ready to snap. You did a great job describing that!

Can't wait for your next one :)

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fic_of_elise April 19 2009, 23:22:54 UTC
i cant wait for my next one either!!! we'll see what happens. this was a surprise. Ryan and I are both happy he got some relief.

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z4rf3 April 19 2009, 22:31:19 UTC
Well, I've started writing comments about five times, only to delete the whole thing, get a cup of coffee, ponder reality, return and try again.

Realizing that that's no good I have vowed to actually write one I'm happy with.

Firstly, I adore the instrumentality in this chapter! Patty asking what's wrong, getting an insufficient answer, and pushing again. I love how he doesn't change his words, doesn't explain himself. He knows Miller understands yet doesn't want to answer. Okay, fine. Patty's had to deal with that earlier and had seen the ramifications of just letting the boy do as he wants. He's not playing that game again, Ryan. Luckily Ryan gets the hint. He's done with asking and is on to demanding now. Of course his actions, I think, already showed that.

Secondly: Patty seeing that the problem is not physical, but mental. Ryan's body is fine. He's capable of playing, its just his mind is not. "No, no, no... stay with me here, not in your head." in other words, stop thinking, Ryan, and just act... you silly boy you! D8Thirdly ( ... )

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fic_of_elise April 19 2009, 23:28:15 UTC
you're amazing, do you know that?

Yes. Yes. and Yes.

Ryan could have physically gotten off several times. He could have slept with some groupie, several times... but he didn't. it wasn't what he needed, and he didn't realize that his frustration wasn't sexual, but sensual. It needed a person there. It needed an outside source to care for him, to be there and not leave him alone. It is this realization that brought Patty and Ryan together.

that, my friend, is the point of this story. I'm so glad you got it.

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z4rf3 April 19 2009, 23:44:47 UTC
Thank you so much for writing this story with so much care and vision! 8D Its not every day I don't just look way too deep at a story! haha

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fic_of_elise April 19 2009, 23:46:06 UTC
i LOVED your analysis. It fueled me and helped me hammer out some future ideas. I think i'll be utilizing our yin and yang. AKA craig and patty.

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buffalorinkrat April 20 2009, 01:53:37 UTC
i like this ending.

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fic_of_elise April 20 2009, 02:05:31 UTC
yay! Im glad you enjoyed it.

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