Wow, I am definitely enjoying this, it's so well fleshed-out already. So whose daughter is Esperanza? I mean, who is her mother? I suspect that is a story for another chapter, no?
And Nick is cute :) Don't strip me of my 'shipper status for admitting that, heh. Chapter 14 of VM Summer is next on my reading list!
I'm so happy to hear that you're enjoying this, and I think a lot of the "fleshed-out'ness" can be attributed to the fact that I have, like, 14 pages of outline on this story. I love this idea, and I wanted to make sure that I didn't write myself into a corner or anything, so I plotted everything out ahead of time. Of course, that makes replying to comments that much more difficult because I just want to TELL everyone what's going to happen. (Like Lilly! OMG! She's not dead, and she's Esperanza's mother! hee ;) Of course, that ruins all the fun, so I won't give anything away, but still. It's hard to gag myself because I'm just so excited about what's in store. Man, I haven't been this excited about a fanfic I was writing in a loooong time. :)
I'm glad that you like Nick. He's supposed to be likeable. So many fanfics create an evil-SO for Logan and/or Veronica, just to make it so obvious why they should be together. Like, "OH, LOGAN, SAVE VERONICA FROM HER ABUSIVE BOYFRIEND!" or ... whatever. I'm trying to avoid that cliche
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Well, since she can't be Weevil's daughter (hee!), maybe Weevil's sister/cousin/aunt/whatever-ish. I'd be interested to see who Logan's choice is. I like Nick too. He seems ok, not too boring (or if he is, V hasn't emphasised that point) I usually avoid fics like that because they tend to be cliche (V has a bf or Logan has a child, not usually both)but I like how you've written this, it's quite enthralling!
I had a lot of fun writing in Mrs. Navarro (especially after how they showed her as all old and sick and on-the-verge-of-death in S2 - grrrr), and she'll be at least referenced again in later chapters. She might even play a role later, but if she does, I haven't specifically outlined that or written it.
Nick is fun - I like him, and he is a little boring (or, at least, he's not as exciting as Logan), but he offers Veronica a chance at having a normal life that she doesn't think she'd be able to have in Neptune.
I'm well aware that a lot of things in this fic are often terribly cliched in other fics, and I'm trying to break the trend. I want this story to try to show character development - both from where L/V were in high school to where they are know to where they will be at the end of the tale. I'm happy to hear that it's keeping your attention and that you're on board for more. Yay! :)
Grrr... Nick is so sweet and I want to hate him but I can't. He's adorable and nice. You really suck. Anyways. Can't wait for more and seeing who is Esperanza's mother.
Yeah, I know, mean me for writing Veronica with a guy who isn't Logan but is still at least a halfway decent guy. ;) He's adorable and nice and fun and ... honestly, feeling more or less like a fish out of water in Neptune, around a lot of people whom he has never met before. Still, he loves Veronica, and I think that's what matters. :)
Details on Esperanza's mother are forthcoming. Although, perhaps not for a few more chapters. And the details surrounding Esperanza will be slowly parceled out over the course of the story as there are layers, even to that story. :)
Thanks so much for the feedback. I'm happy to hear that you're enjoying this! :D
WOW....................... I love this new developement. Esperanza has a sense of mystery around her(who is the mother) that I am just dying to figure it out!!! I've gotta hand it to ya, you have stopped me in my tracks and thats a hard thing to do. I figured out all of the VM mysteries thus far in the first 2 or so episodes. In the MOTW in the type of clue that you get. Even 4 the season3 one
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Wow. Just, wow. Thanks so much for your detailed feedback/spec. I don't know if I've ever had anyone spec on one of my fanfics before. Whee! It just gives me this warm rush of happiness, which - believe me - was more than welcome with the crazy week I've just had.
The truth about Esperanza's maternity isn't all that obvious, although there have been a few general clues at least sprinked throughout the first few chapters. Regardless, I'm not going to confirm or deny anything, except to say that Jackie doesn't exist in this world as she wasn't introduced until well after this fic diverges from canon. I mean, that's not to say that she and Logan couldn't have run into each other in LA or whatever, but it's not like he knew her from high school or anything. Just ... for the record
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Your more than welcome and I love that you loved my review. I didnt know if I had said everything very clearly so I was worried I would come across as if I didnt like your story when I absolutely love it!! I understand your view on the show, I just want them to stay together you know?! Hints about the mother............ I must look back and think like Veronica. Hey, it sometimes helps................. anyway ttyl hope to hear more soon!!! If not already I havent really looked around yet!! lol.
Dude, seriously, I kept the email that had your review enclosed in my inbox for the past week, as I was studying like crazy-mad for a huge test I had earlier this week. I just kept rereading it when I'd get frustrated or tired or whatever. Yeah, this fic has minimal relevance to the world of pharmacy and pharmacy therapy.
But, yeah, seriously, your feedback really meant a lot to me. :) [and I posted Chapter 4 this morning, yay! :)]
Wow, love this fic.. and I know I'm only, oh about 2 years late finding it but still! Question though, did you ever finish this? I can't seem to find any more chapters...and I'm dying to read the rest!
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And Nick is cute :) Don't strip me of my 'shipper status for admitting that, heh. Chapter 14 of VM Summer is next on my reading list!
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I'm glad that you like Nick. He's supposed to be likeable. So many fanfics create an evil-SO for Logan and/or Veronica, just to make it so obvious why they should be together. Like, "OH, LOGAN, SAVE VERONICA FROM HER ABUSIVE BOYFRIEND!" or ... whatever. I'm trying to avoid that cliche ( ... )
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I like Nick too. He seems ok, not too boring (or if he is, V hasn't emphasised that point)
I usually avoid fics like that because they tend to be cliche (V has a bf or Logan has a child, not usually both)but I like how you've written this, it's quite enthralling!
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Nick is fun - I like him, and he is a little boring (or, at least, he's not as exciting as Logan), but he offers Veronica a chance at having a normal life that she doesn't think she'd be able to have in Neptune.
I'm well aware that a lot of things in this fic are often terribly cliched in other fics, and I'm trying to break the trend. I want this story to try to show character development - both from where L/V were in high school to where they are know to where they will be at the end of the tale. I'm happy to hear that it's keeping your attention and that you're on board for more. Yay! :)
Thanks for the feedback! =D
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Details on Esperanza's mother are forthcoming. Although, perhaps not for a few more chapters. And the details surrounding Esperanza will be slowly parceled out over the course of the story as there are layers, even to that story. :)
Thanks so much for the feedback. I'm happy to hear that you're enjoying this! :D
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The truth about Esperanza's maternity isn't all that obvious, although there have been a few general clues at least sprinked throughout the first few chapters. Regardless, I'm not going to confirm or deny anything, except to say that Jackie doesn't exist in this world as she wasn't introduced until well after this fic diverges from canon. I mean, that's not to say that she and Logan couldn't have run into each other in LA or whatever, but it's not like he knew her from high school or anything. Just ... for the record ( ... )
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But, yeah, seriously, your feedback really meant a lot to me. :) [and I posted Chapter 4 this morning, yay! :)]
Thanks again!
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Thanks for the interest! :D
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