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[zoewarren]

Title: Broken Innocence

Comments

[moeckie]

It stands on its own. woo, does it. Would love to see where the rest of it takes you...

[zoewarren]

Thanks for letting me know it makes some sense to people not living in my head. :) I'm never sure.

[zoewarren]

I know this was a thousand years ago now, but the rest of the story that you asked about is posted at my journal.

[rinalin]

Heart breaking.

I loved it though. How each of them react to the same grief. River running. Inara trying to hold herself like she could hold it all in. Mal giving/taking comfort from her. Zoe clinging to her own child, what she has left of Wash. And Jayne... *sigh*

I love Jayne, and your portrayal of him was so perfectly. The man is in perpetual motion, touching, tasting, moving. And that he just went perfectly still--Stayed pefectly still--is such a fitting expression of what he was feeling.

Great job!

[zoewarren]

Thank you :)

[mishbloom]

*whimper* Please say that you haven't hurt Kaylee??

[zoewarren]

Um... do I get to plead the fifth if I'm not american? Probably not. If it's any consolation, I had horrible, horrible dreams after writing that, so I think Kaylee's had her revenge.

[nos4a2no9]

More, please! Your public demands it!

[zoewarren]

Working on it. :) Most of what I have comes long before that moment, and none of it is in a fit state to be read yet. I still don't even know if it's going to be a collection of snippets or an actual story. Is that bad?

[zoewarren]

I know this was a thousand years ago now, but the rest of the story that you asked about is posted at my journal.

[sagey1899]

wow...just wow! though it did leave me wanting more. good job

[zoewarren]

Thank you :)

[zoewarren]

I know this was a thousand years ago now, but the rest of the story that you asked about is posted at my journal.