Counting Heartbeats - for brigits_flame

[fenrischained]

Title: Counting Heartbeats
Genre: Angst, probably.
Warnings: Not really.

Summary: I miss you. I'm sitting here, waiting for you to call. And I count the time in heartbeats.

A/N: Yes, another brigits_flame  entry. *sigh* Seems like that's all I'm doing at the moment. I mean, I like it, and it's really good for my writing, especially the concrit and edits, but...

Comments

[desert_rose]

Your words remind me of how I felt after my now ex husband and I separated. There was nothing to do but wait, even though I knew he wasn't going to call, and wouldn't be back.

A very nicely written entry!
Good luck!

[fenrischained]

Thanks!

Um, sorry about your husband, too. ^-^'

[____hejira]

End it with 0 0 0 not 1. That insinuates that it is still beating. I love the concept of this entry. a lot. Repeating over and over again about being alone doesn't achieve what I think you wanted it too. Just mention it once. The rest of the entry is awesome enough that you don't need that to emphasise the point. Great entry.

Edit 2

[aisling87]

Hello, I'm your secondary editor and will offer a few general comments

Re: Edit 2

[fenrischained]

Yeah... I think I slightly screwed up the ending. I thought so at the time, tbh, but I was in a hurry to post. xD

Thanks for the edit!