surprise, wrath

[frogfrizz]

Title: I See You
Author: frogfrizz
Fandom: Battlestar Galactica/Voyager Crossover
Pairing/s: Cain/Janeway.
Rating: PG
Challenge: Surprise
Word count: 100
A/N: For selenay_x, who wanted more.
Summary: She sees right through her.

Comments

[selenay_x]

Yeah. You so rock. Your interpretation of Cain is so spot on. Thank you.

[frogfrizz]

I was a bit anxious about my interpretation of her. She's a tough nut to crack and I think my perspective on Cain was influenced on all the fiction written about her here in LJ. :) I'm glad you like the drabbles though.

[hockeysaurus]

Oh WOW, the second one is dead-on. That is GREAT.

[frogfrizz]

Thank you :) I aim to please...or at least to please the inner Cain in me. Hehehe.

[jaybee65]

Ooh, nice. The second one is especially excellent!

[frogfrizz]

Thank you. I'm glad you liked the second one. I didn't know how to compress the ideas into 100 words...but I somehow managed it. :) Thanks for dropping by!

[radak]

WOW! Just WOW! I don't have coherent words at the moment. WOW!

*hugs you*

[frogfrizz]

Aw, dearest. :) Just commenting here is more than enough recompense. Love ya lots! And I can't seem to stop saying this: your icons roxxorz! I used one for a meta-discussion-whatever on this pairing, if you don't mind. :)

Re: *hugs you*

[radak]

Thank you.
At the moment I'm in the middle of making a new Janeway/Roslin picture. And I decided that it'd be some kindof a present for your. For your lovely drabbles. And, as I'm a very selfish girl, in hope for more. Also, I'd like to say, *grin* it seems I can think again, that I love the first mini fic, it's amazing. Janeway always was good at reading people and it was only natural that she immediately saw right through Cain. She saw her for what she was. Somewhere along the way fighting for humanity she forgot the meaning of it.

Re: *hugs you*

[frogfrizz]

I'm beginning to wonder if you ever sleep or leave your computer! (Then again, I barely don't these days either, considering school's got me married to my PC).

A present is always lovely :) and kind, and absoutely wonderful of you. You'll get more drabbles for your troubles (though I don't require any gifts, really. Just an added plus, I suppose), because your art is *love*. Actually, I hope I'm able to write a longer fic aside from these 100-word ficlets.

I'm glad you liked the first mini-fic. I had an awkward time wording it and with amazon_syren pointing out its weak spots, I've been given an opportunity to improve the drabble.

And again, :) thanks so much for everything!

[amazon_syren]

Oo. A Certain Lack is very good. I like the last two sentences.

Re: I See You: "put her lips on hers" is a bit of a confusing phrase. I know what it means, because there are two female characters. None the less, I'd tweak it a bit. Perhaps: "...Unobtrusively, softly, she pressed her lips to the admiral's". Or something to that effect.
Also: Cain stiffened, unmoved; but not until Janeway said...
"But not until"? I don't quite follow. That suggests that the stiffening unmoved-ness didn't happen until Janeway spoke, whereas I am under the impression that she was unmoved by the kiss, but moved by the words that followed. Yes?

[frogfrizz]

Hmm, very good insight. :) I'll see what I can do to tweak it. Thank you! It's always wonderful to receive concrit, the rigor of honing one's skills and all.

What's so confusing about femslash is precisely what you just mentioned for "I See You"; I knew the fic needed something, I just didn't realize it had anything to do with the language! :) Glad you pointed it out. I'll post a revision, tell me what you think!

[amazon_syren]

<*reads*>

Much better. :-)