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faythbrady

Fic- Crazy over you 3/5

Sep 30, 2009 21:07

Series Title- Crazy over you 3/5 ( Read more... )

Comments 14

elliejgirl September 30 2009, 21:10:03 UTC

The link from rayne still isnt' working. I just clicked to your journal and got here though.

Nice chapter. I think you've done a good job getting Kaylee's voice.

faythbrady October 3 2009, 14:38:06 UTC

Cheers pet. I think LJ has a vendetta against me.

sunshineali October 1 2009, 01:02:46 UTC

That sure sounded like Kaylee to me. I love this fic.

faythbrady October 3 2009, 14:58:30 UTC

I'm glad, she was so much easier to write than Zoe.

brandywine00 October 1 2009, 03:44:08 UTC

These are just great! Love the way you've caught each character's voice, yes, even Zoe's (I thought you did just fine on that one.) But your Kaylee is definitely spot-on, especially the cheery ramble and slightly bawdy remarks. Gotta love that gal! Nice job.

faythbrady October 3 2009, 14:59:53 UTC

Thank you darlin'. Glad you liked them. Kaylee is a sweetheart and was much easier to write than Zoe and I love writing Mal, so look for him next.

idyllictorture October 1 2009, 07:06:09 UTC

Great job. I was really amused by Kaylee lusting after Jayne. I'm guessing she learned about them before they were a couple?

"...the heat between these two is like an engine coil in full burn..."

Fantastic line! I loved that one.

BTW, I hope you weren't offended by anything I said on the last chapter (which I enjoyed too). I only offer con crit if I think the writing is worthwhile. I never bother if the fic is just plain bad.

faythbrady October 3 2009, 15:03:23 UTC

Not at all. I appreciate any constructive criticism and you were helpful. As long as it's not just "you suck", I'm fine with it. :)

These snapshots are all what people around Serenity have noticed, it's up to you whether they are already in a relationship or just getting there.

Hope you like Mal, he's next.

isje October 1 2009, 07:21:45 UTC

Clear as a strawberry sundae, heehee.

This is an awful cute series, with Jayne being all flirty and shy and probably not even noticing he's doing it :)
Inara and Zoe's parts were good, but Kaylee's is the best so far, I love the way she drools over Jayne.

I wonder if you're going to do apart about how River acts as well? So far you've focused mostly (though not completely) on Jayne flirting with her and taking care of her. Maybe she should flirt back a little? Crazy River flirting is usually very amusing.

faythbrady October 3 2009, 15:07:10 UTC

i just adore watching Jayne as he flirts with River. But you might appreciate the last chapter if you want to see what River's been doing to get his attention.