PotC Fic: As the Sea

[erinya]

Title: As the Sea
Fandom: PotC
Disclaimer: Not my sandbox. I just play here.
Rating: PG
Summary: The Turners have an unexpected visitor. Written for shadphenix who long ago gave me the prompt "Will, daughter." More gen than anything else; all pairings come pre-wrecked. OFC.
Note: Heartfelt thanks to woolymonkey at rough_magic for much valuable feedback.

Comments

[gileonnen]

Oh, dear--that was a wonderfully well-constructed, well-envisioned piece, and very in-character for everyone. Excellent work.

[erinya]

Thank you!

[veronica_rich]

We all pretty much assume that Elizabeth's mother died before the crossing from England, that Weatherby was a widower. But aside from an old bit of script taken out, we've nothing to prove it, I don't think (sort of like the old bit that proved Will had been a cabin boy for two years and had prior sailing experience). Without a mother showing up, we might think the same of Will and Jenny, on a casual glance

[maddarilke]

On the other hand, we know that Elizabeth is capable of being cruel. I think it's a factor in all three films (well, all right, I'm guessing at her behaviour in the third); but she is fully able to hurt with her actions and words as anyone is with a sword. She has betrayed people, lied to them, put her interests first--I don't think it's entirely uncanonic for her to have gone the way of this fic. I think it's an entirely plausible scenario.

But very sad, yes. Sad for Will, and a teensy bit sad for Elizabeth, seeing as Jack is as big a scoundrel in it as Ted Elliot and Terry Rossio are desperately trying to remind us.

[veronica_rich]

On the other hand, we know that Elizabeth is capable of being cruel.

And that's why I didn't take issue with the story itself. After DMC, I can see her being this way, and while I know some people love her for it, I don't like it. I don't like the fact Will still loves her, even though I know a person can't just banish their emotions because they'd like to. As I said, it's a very painful read.

[erinya]

Yes, he loves her even though she's given him nothing back. Except one thing--Jenny--and I think that makes it worth it for him, despite the hell he's been through.

Forgot to say...thanks so much for reading! I can't seem to stop writing these sad stories, though. The last three have been terribly angsty...

Bravissima

[piratemistress]

Oh, I absolutely loved this. We have an entire family now: Jane and Jack Jr., your Jamie and Jenny

Re: Bravissima

[erinya]

*grins* I don't know why they all must have J names, but it just seems to happen that way!

Although I started this way back before Christmas and before I heard the rumors that inspired "Sand and Water," it is the flip side of that story in some important ways. It was nice to write one in which she wasn't the single parent. And there's a mix of emotions here--I think Elizabeth regrets not seeing her daughter grow up and being part of her life, but she doesn't seem to regret the life she's chosen. There has to be a middle ground, but I haven't really found that yet in my head for these characters in the lovely way that artaxastra has, for instance. I've been using fic to problematize lately, I guess.

I don't have issues of parental abandonment, but I can say a parent doesn't have to be at sea to be "missing".And I think that the Jamie of "Sand and Water" would feel that way about his mother, despite how much she loves him and tries her best to take care of them. The reversal of that here is Elizabeth's suggestion that she didn't think she

[tyedyedchicky]

i just clicked on this randomly, and had to say that i loved it, you have a great style and i love your characters.

[erinya]

Thanks so much! I'm glad you came across it and enjoyed it.

[woolymonkey]

Lovely!

[erinya]

Thanks, and thanks again for all your help! I don't know if I was able to fix all of the confusing bits, but I did the best I could.

[woolymonkey]

I don't know if I was able to fix all of the confusing bits,

I can't tell any more either! The other comments suggest you got it spot on.