Lost fic: Recursion [Sawyer, < 350 words]

[eponine119]

Disclaimer: Lost is not mine.
Notes: For Queen gottalovev at the lostsquee luau, who wanted first times. Using for fanfic100 #29, Birth
Summary: The first time, and the second, and the third...

Recursion
by eponine119
August 1, 2007

Comments

[slybrunette]

On the topic of this being slightly similiar to mine: Other than being set in the pilot there are too many differences to even think about comparing the two.

On to the actual feedback. This is wonderful, and I especially like the part where you reference him pulling Sawyer away during that fight because I loved that scene. Great fic!

[eponine119]

I'm glad you agree that the two stories aren't that much alike, beyond timeframe. I didn't want to step on anyone's toes!

And I'm happy that you liked it! :)

[slybrunette]

No worries :) So many people write fanfic everyone's bound to end up finding some type of similarities in someone else's fic.

[halfdutch]

Wow, this was great and it is very different from slybrunette's fic, but they make for excellent back-to-back reading!

I love fics where we get first impressions, especially ones that revisit canon and yours ring truer than anything we usually get on the show when they go back and fiddle with established storylines.

I especially love Jack reminding Sawyer of Christian, partly because he's just another lonely, sad guy in a bar. (And darn that Ana! Shoo!)

And of course there goes Sawyer, sabotaging himself from the very beginning. I like that he keeps track of all these first times in his head. I really liked the whole thing, start to finish. :)

[eponine119]

Thank you so much!

[haldoor]

Wonderful images! And I love that scene with Jack pulling him away from Sayid too!

[eponine119]

Thank you!

[alemyrddin]

I love that first scene... it's only realistic that everyone standing near the check in would have noticed Jack because he's so damn hot he was yelling at the hostess. But I love that Sawyer was perceptive enough to see also the rest:
the defeated sag to the man's shoulders as he walked away, and the way he very gently shielded his eyes with his hand, as though the light hurt him and the world was too much to bear.

very good! :)

[eponine119]

Thank you! I agree, I think most people would have noticed Jack...although would they have remembered after the trauma of the crash? Maybe not.

[bluelittlegirl]

You really painted a picture of these little moments, so small, yet so critical to the Sawyer we love. I am going to friend you because I enjoy your writing, story girl. I hope that is all right.

[eponine119]

Thank you! And I am honored to be friended.