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Boot Hill: Chapter One Redux

Jul 01, 2010 12:29

CHAPTER ONE RETURNS. Shorter and trimmed and better than before! At least, I think so. You be the judge. Chapter two is on its way!

( In which Linds tries to be snarky and just ends up being stuffy )

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Exciting changes chococomilk July 9 2010, 00:33:07 UTC

On the one hand, the old chapter one leads quick into the action which grasps the reader's attention, allowing them to get into the meat of the story and be hooked by it more quickly. On the other hand, the new chapter one is far more enigmatic and that it leaves readers with both dozens of questions and a cliffhanger straight off the bat makes it an improvement in story-telling quality from the previous draft ( ... )

Re: Exciting changes ensnarement July 9 2010, 06:40:26 UTC

asldfkjasdf this is about the nicest comment I could have received today. Or ever. After a series of draining and disheartening events that has made up the past 24 hours, your comment has seriously cheered me up. I love how you caught some really little things in the narrative here that actually end up expanding into bigger things later on in the story (Linds' life of privilege, for one).

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR YOUR KIND WORDS. I will treasure them forever. For real.

I'm really excited now what you think of chapter two. I'll try and have it up tomorrow for you and you alone ;)

Re: Exciting changes chococomilk July 9 2010, 20:03:47 UTC

:) I shall be happy to review it for you.

How many chapters have you got done? Have you a lot from a first draft that you're reconfiguring or are you writing again from the start?

I'm glad my comment came at a good time for you. But it's so exciting that you can show so much in only a single chapter! You can go on in full confidence that you are a fabulous writer even when you have unhappy days.

Re: Exciting changes ensnarement July 13 2010, 17:58:39 UTC

Actually, when I wrote Boot Hill initially for NaNo, I didn't break it up into chapters, so I have NO idea. When I do manage to break it up, though, it'll probably be about 14-16 chapters, or around there. I have a lot of editing and rewriting to do, though. There are about 5 chapters that have received a bit of editing and much needed TLC, that I'll probably be posting within the next couple months before November. I will be continuing to write the 'sequel' for NaNo this year : )

http://ensnarement.livejournal.com/20389.html Chapter two is up! Thanks again for your kind comments and encouragement.

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frankiejetson July 12 2010, 21:34:18 UTC

I missed this! Ahh
I found this easier to read somehow? It feels more concise. I think it's a good length for a chapter, great ending too. But I must be off to read chapter two c:

ensnarement July 13 2010, 17:55:37 UTC

lkjasdfds MY DEAR. ;A; How are you doing?

Thank you so much for reading <3 I'm glad it seemed easy to read and concise. I really appreciate you taking the time, dear. ;_;