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I guessed this one might be yours!! An ending like that immediately makes me think of your stories! I really loved this whole thing - it was light and happy and amusing and also sizzlingly hot - trademark Jae! :D
Aww. That was sweet. Morning sex is always swell in my books; I'm glad you included some.
I think this would have been even better if you'd included some sensory imagery. A lot of it was actions, like "Potter kissed Draco's neck," and such - which is always great, obviously, but it was a nice change of pace when the thickness of Harry's you-know-what was mentioned. Even the smell of his skin or the scent of foreign bed sheets or perhaps a description of the room, or remnants of last night's cologne, the texture of Harry's hair or something... stuff like that would have been really refreshing. Hope you don't mind the suggestions as they're meant out of love - I read your stuff practically every day =D
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I think this would have been even better if you'd included some sensory imagery. A lot of it was actions, like "Potter kissed Draco's neck," and such - which is always great, obviously, but it was a nice change of pace when the thickness of Harry's you-know-what was mentioned. Even the smell of his skin or the scent of foreign bed sheets or perhaps a description of the room, or remnants of last night's cologne, the texture of Harry's hair or something... stuff like that would have been really refreshing. Hope you don't mind the suggestions as they're meant out of love - I read your stuff practically every day =D
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