Moorepark Memoir

[emo_snal]

   So the Geelong* Writing Club puts out an annual anthology and recently put the call out for next edition, and the theme this time is... the hardest theme of all ...open topic. ::cue picture of Edvard Munch's the Scream:: *Geelong being my nearest large town. Submissions may be poetry, flash fiction, short story, and memoir. The flash fiction

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[ravena_kade]

I loved the opening.

While the tenses didn't bother me as I read it, but I am neither an editor or English teacher.

I enjoyed reading this

[wantedonvoyage]

I love your writing.

I mentioned a deli and my strange encounter with its proprietor at a music hall some distance away. What I didn't say was that -- both times I was in there, which was several weeks apart -- the smoke alarm was emitting that dying-battery chirp. It would drive me crazy in ten seconds but they seem to have mastered the art of ignoring it.

If I go in there again I'm going to stop at the pharmacy on the way and have a new D battery in my pocket. I don't want the deli to burn down, they make good pulled-pork sandwiches.

[nibot]

You could upload it to Google docs and then we could collaboratively edit/comment. :-)

[weebleswobble]

I enjoyed reading it, especially the part about the smoke detector and you having only been awake for moments and your brain not catching up right away.
I too was curious about being covered in honey and wondered if it comes out easily in the wash or if it gets everything else sticky.

[emo_snal]

Haha okay maybe I will include that since everyone is asking me (:

Thanks for the feedback (:

[pundigrion]

I was going to say something about the story, but then I got distracted by that amazing photo and fell into a dystopic landscape rabbithole.