Poll time! Hawaii Five-0/Ella Enchanted fusion

[ember_firedrake]

As many of you know, and some may not, I'm working on a Hawaii Five-0/Ella Enchanted fusion. Danny is cursed with obedience, and shenanigans and angst ensue. It's a delightful story to write, and I love it to pieces, but I'm wondering if I can get a little feedback on a couple points that are stalling me. If you have any questions about the story

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[spilled_notes]

Okay, first thinky thought regarding Q1:

To me it really depends on the overall tone you're going for with the fic. Obviously there will be some crack/humor because it's Ella Enchanted and that movie is gloriously, beautifully cracky and hilarious. So to me, the length and bitchiness of the explanation regarding how he was cursed depends on a) how cracky your fic is going to be [i.e. you could have some long, absolutely ridiculous tale about like watermelons and pissed off fairies or s/t idefk] and b) the importance you feel the explanation has. [Although that one can be a subjective thing when it comes to the audience.] From my point of view, a medium-ish sized [maybe a few paragraphs] explanation is as big as it should get, because while I would love to read about some hilarious, hair-brained shenanigan that caused Danny to be cursed, I don't want to spend an entire page, or even like six paragraphs on it. /shrug

Thinky thoughts on Q3:

I would absolutely love if maybe they like, engage in sex while Danny's cursed but they don't

[ember_firedrake]

First of all, thanks for the feedback. :)

The story itself is actually relatively serious. In fact, there are some moments where it gets downright angsty (toying with the idea of Wo Fat finding out and using the curse to keep tabs on Five-0). Also, like with Ella Enchanted, this is something Danny has to deal with from birth. Danny's parents don't like talking to him about it, and at one point even tell him to stop asking. So, I know I have to come up with some sort of explanation eventually, I just need something that meshes fairly well within the universe.

Ooo, I like the not-going-all-the way idea. Especially if Steve doesn't know, at that point. One of the challenges in writing, I have it so that Danny is ordered not to tell people about his curse (for his own protection; order was issued by his father when he was young). This makes sense in the context of the story, but I have to wonder about how much Danny is allowed to say if other characters guess about his curse.

But anyway, I really like the sort-of sex idea. :D

[spilled_notes]

Hmmmm. Definitely a good question. XD Maybe he can make gestures and "eh" or "mmhmm" noises the "warmer" Steve gets? Lol.

Kudos for the Ella Enchanted AU, btw. I've always loved that movie, but I don't know if I've ever seen an AU in one of my fandoms before? (This isn't to say there aren't, because there probably are, I just didn't find any relating to my ships.) Also, I'm biased towards Anne Hathaway because, well. She's Anne Hathaway.

[popkin16]

DAMN WOMAN. I THINK I JUST WENT TO TICKY BOX HEAVEN. In other words, I may have hit too many, but it was SO FUN!

RE: #2 Steve Knowing
I think I ticked every box, and I thought I'd explain why. See, I can't see Danny telling people this for the exact reasons you listed. But Steve would notice something is up, because Steve pays attention to Danny -- like, a lot. Danny baiting & watching is one of his favorite things. So Steve would get suspicious, and when it comes to people he loves cares about, he wants to fix their problems, to help them. So he'd do some digging (perhaps utilizing his Super Seal Connect-shuns), maybe form a theory that Danny is cursed or something, and then wait patiently for Danny to trust him enough to tell him. And in the meantime, Steve does everything he can to avoid giving an order, unless it's life-or-death or just, you know, Steve stupidity.

/babble

[ember_firedrake]

Oh yes, Steve definitely gets that something is up. Though on the waiting patiently front, he will end up waiting a while, because Danny has been ordered not to tell anyone about his curse /o\ (protective measure, set in place by his dad).

This is giving me an excuse to rewatch episodes, and catalog all the times Steve gives Danny an order ^_^

[popkin16]

Mmm, that makes sense. At the very least Steve should notice something is up. Ohh, that's clever of Danny's dad. Perhaps Danny could find a way around that order? (Like if Danny's dad said, "Never speak of your curse," well, that doesn't mean Danny can't write about it.) So, a roundabout way of telling Steve?

I admit to finding the idea of Steve ordering Danny around kind of hot. With Danny bitching the entire time, of course, and completing Steve's order to the letter, if not the spirit.

[ember_firedrake]

I was too clever for that, I wrote in a stipulation on the command given to Danny by his dad that he couldn't tell anyone about it or write about it. Why do I have to make things difficult for myself? ;) Though, I'm trying to figure out how it works if someone guesses, is Danny allowed to talk about it then, since he technically hasn't told them about it?

Oh, I agree, it is all kinds of hot. Which is why I'm kinda tempted to go the dream route, that way Danny can imagine, in a perfect world, what it would be like to have sex with Steve while still under the curse. Because I really like that idea, but I don't want to actually create a dub-con situation within the action of the story. (I can't remember, you saw my twitporn, correct?)

[sidhegaire]

I think that perhaps if you decide to go the route of 'lets have sex' before the curse is lifted, Steve should know, and doesn't say a word throughout the whole thing (or until its too much and Danny could gag him w/ the tie...just a thought not to be too...kinky ^_^) in order to make Danny feel comfortable and to let Danny trust that he wouldn't take advantage (though Steve ordering Danny around *move your leg her* *thats right, do that again* *tell me, does that feel good* etc ((I SUCK at writing porn so yeah...)) you know...if Steve wants to be a little mean but Danny lets him as a sign of trust) So those are my thoughts. ^_^

[ember_firedrake]

Yeah, when I started the idea I had initially been against any kind of sex before the curse was broken. But now, the more I think about it, I might go the other route, as long as it's very clear that there is consent. As far as Danny knows, there's no way for the curse to be broken, so it wouldn't necessarily make sense for him to not pursue a relationship with Steve because he's waiting for curse-free sexytimes.

As to question 1

[dreadpiratekat]

I'll tell you in person. Mind you that is after I typed out a bible and erased it. Where is my brain? Anyway I love your convoluted mind and keep writing. ;)