Comments | elliotsmelliot: GFG Drabbles

elliotsmelliot

GFG Drabbles

Oct 15, 2009 17:35

For zelda_zee ( Forgive, and ye shall be forgiven (Eko, forsaken) )

Comments 21

zelda_zee October 15 2009, 22:33:34 UTC

I really, really love all of these. You write from three very different men's POVs, and yet you capture them all with precision and insight.

elliotsmelliot October 16 2009, 03:04:02 UTC

Thanks! And thanks for getting me to try Eko.

sedauny October 16 2009, 00:09:20 UTC

I liked these. You got the three voices right, and the pieces are very appropriate for each--Eko recognizing the monster as kin, a survivor as much as any other island inhabitant, and forgiving it; Miles irascible and aware of the reckless stupidity that he is helping with, mourning with snark his last connection with the freighter; and Richard the endless, enjoying things which are finite, brief and mundane (those were good examples, too, the meal, book and coup are all things I bet Richard can enjoy--how many coups must he have seen, from his position as island referee?).

elliotsmelliot October 16 2009, 03:05:24 UTC

Thank you for such detailed feedback. I am still not 100% happy with the Richard one. He is so hard to get a handle on.

haldoor October 16 2009, 02:26:59 UTC

Oh very well done. These all capture these men so well! ;-)

Not to be critical, but should that 'due' in the last one be 'do'? It would make more sense if so.

elliotsmelliot October 16 2009, 03:02:30 UTC

Thank you.

Thanks for pointing out the typo. I had not noticed! That was great of you.

haldoor October 16 2009, 03:11:35 UTC

np! I actually debated whether I should, but so glad to hear you wanted to know! It does read so much better now! ;-)

elliotsmelliot October 16 2009, 03:39:44 UTC

Thanks! I really appreciate glaring errors like that being pointed out.

bachlava October 16 2009, 02:37:46 UTC

Ooh, these are lovely! Can't speak to the Daniel one, but I love the way you've given us such spare, rich images of Richard and Eko. They both have so many facets, and you've done an excellent job at choosing ones to illuminate and doing it brilliantly.

elliotsmelliot October 16 2009, 03:07:06 UTC

Thank you! Given how complicated these men are, the restrictions of a drabble helped set the mood. Thanks for reading and commenting.

gottalovev October 16 2009, 02:47:19 UTC

I still think those are BRILLIANT. really really well done! (especially mine, but I have a bias! *grins* )

elliotsmelliot October 16 2009, 03:07:34 UTC

That is my favourite too. Thanks for the great prompt and the feedback on all of them.