Comments | elisi: The Summer After Part 4

elisi

The Summer After Part 4

Nov 25, 2004 13:49

Well, here it is - finally! I have no idea why this is so hard to write... I have it all perfectly worked out in my mind, but when I write it down it falls apart and has to be re-assembled very carefully. *sigh ( Read more... )

my fic, the summer after

Comments 24

speakr2customrs November 25 2004, 07:19:05 UTC

I like it a lot. I'm on edge wondering what they've got planned for Giles.

elisi November 25 2004, 07:21:59 UTC

Thanks for liking! :)

And you'll have to be on edge for a while I'm afraid...

kathyh November 25 2004, 07:44:13 UTC

This is really intriguing and very enjoyable. I'm loving the way Spike and Angel are working as a team and the way Giles notices the changes in them.

I love all the little details about the demon bar too. "King's Arms" indeed *g*, the demonic Real Ale drinkers and all the little comments in the background. Very nicely done.

elisi November 25 2004, 08:01:32 UTC

Oh, thank you for commenting! :)

And (obviously) one of my favourite parts of AtS s5 was Angel and Spike's friendship, and how by the end they had a really good relationship.

And pubs are fun - my father-in-law loves Real Ale, and my sister-in-law worked in a pub for a while - they're wonderful places, so I thought I'd add a bit of proper englishness to my story! ;)

shapinglight November 25 2004, 08:29:01 UTC

Liking this more and more. I love the Spike/Angel dynamic!

elisi November 25 2004, 08:43:51 UTC

I love the Spike/Angel dynamic!

*Thank you*!!! It's my favourite ship (although in a non-slashy way) right after Spuffy!

(Also very glad you're liking it - especially since this bit was so awkward to write...).

shapinglight November 25 2004, 08:45:54 UTC

I also loved Illyria and the beer mats.

elisi November 25 2004, 08:54:44 UTC

Heh! :) Well, what is there for a bored demon God to do in a pub?

hobbituk November 25 2004, 09:41:14 UTC

I've really been enjoying this - I like the way you are taking the end of Angel and showing the friendship that was developing again with Spike and Angel.

One small thing, really nitpicky, so feel free to disregard it, but in the paragraph where you say "tow the party line", I think the actual term is "toe the party line". This site here ( http://www.grammartips.homestead.com/toetheline.html ) explains it better than I can.

The story itself is great though. I can't wait for the update!

elisi November 25 2004, 10:06:28 UTC

Thank you so much for you comments! I just adore the chemistry between the two charaters, and somehow that has made me write!

And *thank you* for pointing out my mistake! This is what comes of not having a beta-reader and having english as a second language (sort of). Will go fix now!

the_royal_anna November 25 2004, 15:00:20 UTC

Oh, lovely. The scene in the pub works so beautifully - this line, particularly - ...he wondered what Buffy would say if she could see them now. Or maybe this was how she'd always seen them..., I think because it highlights how much Buffy's world it was, and how little we really know it without her. It makes everything feel wide open, as if anything might happen. And the wonderful way you've used Giles' perspective adds to that sense.
And Fred! How? I can't wait to find out.

elisi November 25 2004, 23:01:25 UTC

Oh, thank you for such lovely feedback! And trust you to pick out that particular line! I think Spike and Angel are very private people who opened up to Buffy, but not really to anyone else (whilst in Sunnydale anyway).

::Thinks::

It's probably a bit like Andrew and Jonathan when Willow is trying to kill them ("it's just Willow") - they think they know her, when in reality they only know a small part!

And I'll try to find more time to write somewhere...