FIC: It Was Not Love

[featherxquill]

Title: It Was Not Love (Until It Became Impossible To Be Anything But)
Author: shyath
Pairing: Lily/Narcissa
Rating: PG-13
Prompt: #34. Lily/Narcissa (Marauders Era), ‘I do not love you as if you were salt-rose, or topaz,/or the arrow of carnations the fire shoots off./I love you as certain dark things are to be loved,/in secret, between the shadow and

Comments

[therealsnape]

LilyandNarcissa Isn't it typical how some couples are refered to like that: Lilyandnarcissa, an entity, rather than two separate people. Well, Lily and Narcissa are not, not in your fic or in canon, but we all know couples like that, I think. And I can see how Narcissa would want this: to be part of LilyandNarcissa, that well-established, charming couple. And even if they are, to some, the token lesbians, they would still know for themselves that they are, in fact, very much Lily and Narcissa.

You're doing a great job of showing Narcissa's denial, and Lily's strength. And the flower theme is wonderfully done.

I know I shouldn't. The fic is great as it stands. But I'll be outspoken, too, because that way the first one has said it, and perhaps others will follow.

Fluffy Bunnies R Us.
("Did you have to choose that line?" sez the Greasy Git)

[shyath]

My instinctive reaction to your first sentence is: OMG, like Brangelina?! Or - or - or I dunno!

Okay, sorry, I'm back among the world of the rational (though that, in and out of itself, is probably a sign of delusion - or too much sugar) and thanks so much! Part 2 will be uploaded sometime next week (RL is being such a hindrance at the moment) and yes, yes, I had to choose that line. Mwahahaha! It's all part of my evil plan, you see. Darn, I have got to come down from this sugar high.

[lash_larue]

Interesting how it's Narcissa that is so uncertain here, it feels like she is trying to drive Lily away, since she cannot bring herself to break it off.

I hope Bella doesn't find out about this.

The title is perfect!
L

[shyath]

*gaps* If Bella were to find out ...

I dunno why, but I have a pattern of writing Narcissa and Lily this way - glad you liked the title (I thought it was a dash of genius on my part - aaaand I am NOT known for my modesty)!

[kellychambliss]

the barely there but more than adequately sharp thorns that cemented Lily as a rose in Narcissa’s mind instead of her namesake.

A good description of how I think Lily must have been. And it's easy to feel Narcissa's desperation here.

[shyath]

I've always imagined Lily to be a bit of a spitfire, I mean, she had to put up with the likes of James and Sirius, right? And thank you! It was so short, I was worried I did not convey the emotions well.

[cranky__crocus]

...as they lay spent next to each other, limbs tangled with the intimacy of familiarity and routine...
Lovely line. Some fantastic imagery in this fic!

...the barely there but more than adequately sharp thorns that cemented Lily as a rose in Narcissa’s mind instead of her namesake.
Going to admit to having a 'thing' for rose comparisons in people. I like to think that Lily would have to be a bit more of a rose to have handled being in love with James and still caring toward Severus. Also, loving the idea of a deviation from script and how it throws the two off.

I love this young Narcissa, who is not yet entirely sure of herself - unsure enough that even her denial is leaning toward realisation. I love that Lily is the barbed one, egging her on.

I will join RealSnape, if only because I can always do with a bit of fluff: Fluffy Bunnies R Us.

♥
Kiwi

[shyath]

*squees* I have to say, I responded to the comment above yours without looking at yours and I made the same (similar) observation - well, here, I'll quote it - "I've always imagined Lily to be a bit of a spitfire, I mean, she had to put up with the likes of James and Sirius, right?" Whee!

Thanks so much for the kind words and Part 2 (aka the fluffy to the angst) will be uploaded sometime this coming week (since RL has demanded my attention)!

[featherxquill]

This is beautiful and painful. So very sensory, and I love the flower imagery.

[shyath]

Thank you! I'm always pleasantly surprised when people comment using literary terms. Makes me feel - like writing fics is more than just for fun, you know?