Fic: Notes from the Journey

[dune_drd]

Title: Notes from the (temporal) Journey
Summary: Where the future might lead Jack didn't know, but after nearly dying the thought of even having a future was a feeling like being drunk on champagne.
Characters: Jack, Nine, Rose
Spoilers: The Doctor Dances
Rating: Mild PG
Word count: 6421
Notes: Written for wendymr who won me over at help_haiti and who wanted to

Comments

[xwingace]

Yay, posted!

XWA

[dune_drd]

:D

[aeron_lanart]

Too tired to get my brain together to comment properly but I have to say something or I know I'll forget.

This is gorgeous and I love it.

[dune_drd]

Thanks! A comment is great, no matter the content :D

[wendymr]

Oh, this is just beautiful! I'm so glad I made you finish it and post it :)

I adore post-TDD stories showing how Jack found his place with the Doctor and Rose. He's so certain, here, that he's going to be kicked out, and then when that doesn't happen that he's going to be judged and found wanting (and, incidentally, I just loved the Doctor's one-word answer, Potential, when Jack asked what he saw in humans). And then when he shows he's a hero after all - not that we had any doubt - and almost kills himself for it... that gave me a lump in my throat :) You write these three wonderfully.

And perfect final line:

"Welcome aboard," the Doctor said, and Jack fell asleep with the sensation of the Doctor's hand resting on his shoulder.

Thank you!

One tiny suggestion: check your paragraph breaks, as sometimes you only have one hard return, so there's not a clear para break.

And please link this one betterwiththree!

[dune_drd]

So glad you like it! As for the paragraph breaks, I always put in too many of those, so I tried to go a little more easy here.. anyway, fixed it now (I think...).

[dshael]

That's a beautiful and fascinating look into Jack's mind this early in their adventures! I love the gradual acceptance, and the way you dealt with Jack's memory issues. Saving this one to the hard drive! :)

[dune_drd]

Thank you so much! It's been sitting on my harddrive for so long, it's great to see people enjoy it!

[lindenharp]

Guided over here on a rec from Wendymr, and I'm so glad! This is my favorite subgenre of Whofic -- Jack's first days on the TARDIS. You've brilliantly captured his wonder, curiosity, and fear.

It was too late for backpedalling now. Jack was travelling with a Destroyer of Worlds, and the being was answering his questions.

Oh, yes. Fear and wonder.

[dune_drd]

I'm being recced already? Cool :D

[lindenharp]

Wendy is a Force of Nature when it comes to recs. :-)

Re-reading this, I love it all the more. I did notice what might be a typo. Should 'temporal' be 'temporary'?