Badfic Challenge by Mousewrites

[mousewrites]

Title: Hello mudder, hello fater
Wordcount: 852
Prompt:Camp's only been in session for a week and it's already turned into the long summer ever, for the newest senior counselor at Camp Windy Lake, Ray Kowalski. His girlfriend, Stella, who dragged him into this gig in the first place, has told him that she thinks they ought to see other people. The

Comments

[ulthyrja]

You know, I love Benton being so formal and it's camp!fic. Aww!!!

[shoemaster]

I would've loved to have seen more, but dude, camp councilor [sic] Ray and Fraser and oh god, "IS HE SPITTING OUT TEETH" and the hankies. *dies*

[mergatrude]

That last moment of consensus between the Rays was terrific! Very cool!

[kinetikatrue]

This is brilliant and awesome and . . . yeah. So glad you decided to turn it in.

[china_shop]

Ben suddenly vaulted up onto the table, trying to look into Ray’s mouth with a penlight he produced from nowhere.

Oh, that is PERFECT! And the "Did you just spit out teeth! He did! That’s SO gross!" line. Just awesome. Yay! :)