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[briyamineko84]

Title: What Becomes of Us (4 of ?)
Author: Bri
Rating: R
Characters/Pairing: Bobby/John, other couples include OCs
Summary: He missed them more than anything, but except for Johnny, they were still X-men. He was on the run from them, too. Post X-3, Bobby makes a decision that changes everything.
Notes: Told mainly from Bobby's POV, and for the

Comments

[worm_my_way]

Awwww man, you are really breaking my heart here. Bobby's confusion and uncertainty really come through this chapter. I feel so sad for him. Its really difficult to leave everything you have known practically your whole life and you portray that really well.
I like how he feels that he should be lonely and not have any fun or make new friends, as a punishment for what he has done.
For a moment there I thought there was going to be an accident and Bobby will be forced to use his powers and be outed as a mutant, I'm actually glad that not what happened.
I'm dying to know what exactly happened. I have a lot of questions that need answering. If Bobby saved John or helped him escape then where the hell is he.
Can't wait to find out more, until next time, bye.

P.S. Sorry for the long post, I didn't realise I was blathering!

[briyamineko84]

I'm so glad that's what came through, because that's what I was trying to do. Most of your questions should probably be answered in the next two chapters or so. Definitely in the next three!

And don't apologize! I love long posts! Thank you so much for commenting!

[_profiterole_]

This chapter seems perfectly fine to me. I like what you're doing with the characters. ^__^

[briyamineko84]

Thank you! I'm definitely having a lot of fun writing them, so I'm glad you like things so far!

How sad

[indykitty]

I feel for Bobby. I wonder how he's gonna get John out and get away with it. How hard are the X-men really looking for him and is John grateful? I created an account just to keep up with this story.

Re: How sad

[briyamineko84]

Thank you so much! That totally made my day. And that will definitely be answered soon! Well, most of that.

[nexusofcrisis]

Your dialogue flows so naturally it makes me a bit jealous. Great work on this. I'm loving Bobby's thoughts as he makes his decisions. Excellent stuff.

[briyamineko84]

There was a lot of dialogue in this chapter, I didn't realize that until after I'd finished it. I'm definitely happy it seems to be working okay. And I'm really enjoying writing Bobby and his thought processes, even though sometimes they go on a lot longer or more often than I intended.

Thank you so much for commenting!