DUET 5: darkcivet and hiddenhibernian

[ningloreth]

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Title: In Memoriam
Author: darkcivet
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 2,782
Summary: Power. Wealth. Family. He had a plan. She had a plan. Life, however, had its own agenda.

Comments

[hiddenhibernian]

Wow, I didn't expect Lucius' funeral to be the occasion Draco was preparing for - it took me completely by surprise! I love the structure of this, how it goes full circle and allows Draco to take stock of what he has achieved. There's so many possibilities left, too - the Granger-Malfoys have barely got started...

Thank you so much, this was lovely! Some of my favourite bits:
"It spoke of loyalty and honour - neither of which were a Malfoy staple" - can't argue with you there...
Their bickering about Draco being nervous, and the perfect conclusion: "“I’m not nervous,” Draco said, taking a deep breath. “I’m bloody terrified.”"
"the virgin friendly clothes" - *dies laughing*
The extremely awkward family gathering - it was never going to be easy, was it?

[darkcivet]

Thanks. :)

[ariel_riddle]

This was beautiful and what a lovely read!
I had no idea what Draco was preparing for until the very end and then it tugged on my heart strings.
Without wisdom, power became a disease. Without restraint, wealth faded into nothing. Without love, family meant nothing but a hole in the ground once they were gone.
^^These lines were epic.
I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. Well done!

[darkcivet]

Thank-you. :)

[pierrej92]

Wow! That ending really shocked me and I'm grinning because it was written in so well!
I loved the breakdown of the sections with the titles of power, wealth, family! It really weaved the story in beautifully!
I loved this line: I'm a Malfoy, everyone loves me.”

[darkcivet]

Thank-you so much. I love shocking people. ;)

[sarenathegolden]

I really liked how you've packaged their very own agendas into the values of power, wealth, and family, and tied that up with Lucius' funeral. Seems that they've looked for similar things, but for different reasons. And I was delighted to read that they still found more than that <3.

From somewhere around Potter’s feet on the floor, the gangly ginger piped up. “You bought them to get us to stop badgering you because you corrupted Hermione over to the dark side, not because you plan to impregnate her with your demon spawn.”

That really made me grin :D. Ron at his best.

[darkcivet]

Thank-you. :)

[ningloreth]

I really like the form of this story, with the repeated Power, Wealth, Family and the separate sections.

You have so many great lines I can't quote all of them, but I love Draco's funeral oration and the way he scratches out that last line, and I love the way you switch from emotion to wit in these:

Narcissa wiped at her tears. “It sounds perfect.”

Draco grinned. “I’m a Malfoy, we deserve perfect.”

And I love the ending, with Draco putting his hand on Lucius's headstone and saying "Good bye."

[darkcivet]

Thank-you so much. :)