ladyloves! - a f/f comment ficathon

Jun 23, 2012 11:00

I have been wanting to do this for awhile, so, LET'S.

ladyloves!

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dollsome June 24 2012, 07:42:44 UTC
black swan - nina/lily - dance me through the panic 'til I'm gathered safely in

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theviolonist June 30 2012, 01:13:38 UTC
nina/lily; pg-13; dance my way under the wires (into your wired heart)One of them is drunk, and it isn't Nina ( ... )

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theviolonist June 30 2012, 01:14:37 UTC

When she wakes up Nina feels sick and heavy, her mouth sour, tasting of vomit. Lily is asleep, her head on Nina's lap.

It wasn't a dream.

Nina flips her (pink) phone open and gnaws at her (pink) nails through the first four rings, until her (not pink) mother picks up. "Nina," she says, "where were you?"

"I'm at the hospital," Nina whispers. She feels like a robot. Lily doesn't stir. "Didn't they call you?"

"I don't know," her mother says, and there are a few moments of silence as she searches through her phone history, her breathing coming heavy through the line. Nina puts it away from her ear.

"Why are you whispering?" her mother asks, and then: "Come home."

"Okay," Nina says, and murmurs a mechanic I love you before hanging up. "I'm not whispering," she says to the silence.

You are, the silence answers ( ... )

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theviolonist June 30 2012, 01:15:40 UTC
Nina can do anything. Her mother has told her enough times: she's pretty, she's young, she's healthy, moderately rich: there's no way she can't achieve anything she sets her mind to. This is it. This is the only chance. Perfection.

Nina can dance with a twisted spine and ribs that feel like they're broken. She kind of likes the pain, to be honest.

And then of course there's Lily - the Black Swan -, looking at her from the other side of the room, her eyes dripping with golden brown, her long thighs, the way her chest heaves regularly as she breathes, in, out, in, out, not like Nina (when Nina breathes it's in in in when she's feeling greedy and cold and out out out when it's all too much).

"Why don't you like me?" Lily asks. She takes a sip from her water bottle. A droplet catches on her lips. That's why I don't like you."I like you just fine," Nina says. "Besides, I'm not here to like people ( ... )

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portions_forfox June 30 2012, 22:52:12 UTC
holy Jesus Christ this is fucking amazing. Best thing I've read in a long time. I want to quote it back to you but there are so many lines that I just love. And every line is important, every line is phrased so beautifully, flowing and intense and sharp and dhflflasjddks how do you good writing.

This. Was. Flawless.

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theviolonist July 1 2012, 12:34:03 UTC
Oh my God, love, thank you so much! I don't know what to say that's stronger than thank you, but if there's a word, have it. Merci infinement.

(You do know there's one more part, though, right? Though you've got me thinking - maybe ending it there would be a good idea.)

Thank you thank you ♥

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portions_forfox July 2 2012, 05:32:30 UTC
Oh yeah, haha, I think I did read the second part I just forgot to comment on the right one, ack.

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theviolonist June 30 2012, 01:15:51 UTC
Lily's apartment is slow and ochre, with a metal door and a wooden little table in the middle of the living-room. There are black and white photos in some corners, like friendly ghosts popping in to say hi. Nina hates it. She feels out of place here, even more so than usual ( ... )

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dollsome June 30 2012, 18:41:46 UTC
"Why don't you like me?" Lily asks. She takes a sip from her water bottle. A droplet catches on her lips. That's why I don't like you.

Oh my heart! Unsettling and vibrant and totally lovely. ♥

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theviolonist July 1 2012, 12:31:24 UTC
Thank you so much, dear! I'm glad you liked it ♥

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theagonyofblank July 22 2012, 10:07:47 UTC
There are so many lines I loved. This was all kinds of lovely.

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theviolonist July 23 2012, 11:49:21 UTC
Thank you so much, dear ♥

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