Comments | discoveredinalj: Discovered when you see this: Raid, by moonlightmead

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Discovered when you see this: Raid, by moonlightmead

Nov 20, 2011 10:28

So byslantedlight mentioned the arrival of the new challenge, and I was looking at the old challenge again, and I finally had an idea. So, in great haste, before the challenge closes, 5000 words of public indecency. I know, I am the first to say "No sane government employee would risk their career and reputation like this." But apparently they are going to ( Read more... )

mlmead, whenyouseethis

Comments 17

murphybabe November 20 2011, 14:18:11 UTC

Fantastic! So pleased to see it here! I loved the pace of it and the humour. I rather like a doped-up Doyle and I enjoyed Bodie's thoughts as he tried to control a Doyle he's obviously never met before. Makes you wonder where they go from here ;)

moonlightmead November 23 2011, 08:08:09 UTC

Thanks! Yes, definitely Bodie didn't expect any of that. Glad the pacing worked. It's something I have problems with.

msmoat November 20 2011, 15:54:51 UTC

Well, I'm about to go out and shovel snow. But I shall stay entertained by the image of a high Doyle and a trying-to-cope Bodie. *g* (It also felt, um, Chrstmassy to me, but that's likely down to the snow. *g*) Thank you! Very entertaining. And, yes, what murphybabe said about wondering what happens next with them!

moonlightmead November 23 2011, 08:10:09 UTC

Christmassy? I imagine it as summer, but now you have me thinking I should have kept this and posted it in the Christmas Pros thing. Bugger.

Glad it entertained - thanks!

shooting2kill November 20 2011, 16:52:44 UTC

No sane government employee would risk their career and reputation like this."

Oh, they would, they would! The way you've written this makes it completely believable.

Leaning against the wall, Bodie watched: a blasé and solitary tough. The party pulsed and swirled around them.

That's Bodie to a tee, I love the way you've summed him up.

Great writing! Many thanks for this Sunday treat.

moonlightmead November 23 2011, 08:13:09 UTC

"Oh, they would, they would!" - well, they do in my head, at least.

Thanks a lot. It was a lot of fun to write.

snailbones November 20 2011, 23:10:04 UTC

That was brilliant fun, ta muchly, and totally believably them. You've left me with a big grin.

moonlightmead November 23 2011, 08:14:40 UTC

Hiya, and you're very welcome. Glad to promote grins!

sc_fossil November 20 2011, 23:27:26 UTC

I admit a fondness for a loopy Doyle. This was fun. Bodie got what he wanted after all, and Doyle was more than happy to provide it. Thanks!

moonlightmead November 23 2011, 08:16:30 UTC

Loopy. What a splendid word! Glad you enjoyed it.