Something I wrote. Um... with an image to go along with it, kinda. I posted it on dA but it's making me freak the fuck out so I'm posting it here, in case I flip a shit and delete it.
Goddamn I love good prose and this is some delicious words upon words. Thank you for posting this and with the imagery it makes everything so rich. SAD END but ahh man such a well written one.
Oh my, thank you very very much for not only reading it, but filling my head with bees of flattery. Wow! AND DON'T WORRY IT'S NOT THE END :'D really more of a beginning. Oh mysterious.
Ahh no no I love prose. Heck I write alot of it myself but I'm too shy to show any of it honestly. So I know how it is to want to share a piece of your imagination, something more personal. And scared that it wouldn't even make it off the ground. Or people would just prefer it there.
Heey, in case you DO delete the dA, I'm copying my comment from there and posting it here :| because I MUST BE HEARD. really. Ulysses fan right here. :o
"Man everything you post about Ulysses makes me like him more and more and this is heart-wrenching to read and view. I think the fact that this is extra-dark adds a lot to the feeling of being alone and frightened. We can hardly see anything outside of what you describe in the writing and I think it ties in well with the fact that he's blind ;3; Poor Ulysses.
I'm scared to have any favorite characters of yours because I'm pretty sure you like to torture them. Or if not LIKE to, they just get tortured anyway.
Re: copied this.dezemberedJuly 12 2009, 02:17:40 UTC
Aw thank you, you're really too kind ;; I'm glad you like him, especially because he's fairly new and I'm so used to having to build and build and build on characters for years before they're even remotely likable (see: everyone ever).
I hope the... not being able to see outside of what's in the writing is a reflection of my abilities and not inabilities, because that wasn't intentional XD OH GOD HOW DOES I WROTE STORY
Re: copied this.theywereconesJuly 12 2009, 22:41:34 UTC
Wellll...I'm a sucker for the scary/sweet combo, so Ulysses caught my attention right away 8D I think it is also maybe because he IS new, and I don't have to back track at all to see him develop or get to know him. :o Like I do with your other characters X3
As for the drawing, I'm just assuming it came out like it was envisioned in your mind's eye, so perhaps it was a subconscious effort to give off that claustrophobic feeling in the images. (I imagine being blind (or maybe newly blinded) to be very claustrophobic. Small steps, and afraid of movement for fear of tripping/falling off a cliff/mauled by a jaguar)
...OR MAYBE JUST UNCANNY COINCIDENCE that they come off this way and he is blind. OR maybe I just read too much into stuff
OH HAY OMG THAT LITTLE cutey joobr drew is so cute I want to marry it. it looks a little like my tattoo. I wish I could tattoo that on my other arm. okay now I have gone beyond fan into scary..
Let me preface this by saying that this is not an attack or saying your writing sucks or anything, but I know that I love getting hard critique so hopefully I'm not offending you by doing the same
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Thanks so much Felix, of course I don't take any of this as an attack! Ah! I need a lot of work with my writing. I'm so shy about it that I mainly keep it to myself, which isn't really conducive to improvement.
A lot of the clunky wording is really more of my thoughts rushing around and not knowing how to place them, I certainly don't want to be the new Tolkien or Lovecraft.
um um um but yes thank you so much for pointing all this out, this helps a lot not only for this piece but future pieces (of course). I wish I had a better response other than copious thank-yous!
Aaaauuugh this is so beautiful, my goodness. I-I think I say this every time you post story things, but I am so totally impressed with the imagery you can come up with ;n;...The attention to atmosphere as well as action makes it all the more exciting...fires burning, wind sweeping... "They stung badly, the salt working as a sieve to clear the blood and dirt away. His cheek pressed to the sand, and the cool water came up again, filling his mouth with brine." Aaaaah feelings like that make the words so tactile. And of course your pictures go with this like cheese goes with apples. Lovely, lovely.
S-so this is before he became all monstery and mysterious, jah 8D?
I love the descriptions, your choice of words brings up such clear images, little illuminated moments of sensation. The darkness of the illustrations goes so well with the heavy feeling and atmosphere, the fourth one especially. Thank you for sharing :, ]
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So ahh share more when you have the chance.
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"Man everything you post about Ulysses makes me like him more and more and this is heart-wrenching to read and view. I think the fact that this is extra-dark adds a lot to the feeling of being alone and frightened. We can hardly see anything outside of what you describe in the writing and I think it ties in well with the fact that he's blind ;3; Poor Ulysses.
I'm scared to have any favorite characters of yours because I'm pretty sure you like to torture them. Or if not LIKE to, they just get tortured anyway.
butwhoamikiddingisolovethisdude."
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I hope the... not being able to see outside of what's in the writing is a reflection of my abilities and not inabilities, because that wasn't intentional XD OH GOD HOW DOES I WROTE STORY
And don't worry, he's alright :'D!
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As for the drawing, I'm just assuming it came out like it was envisioned in your mind's eye, so perhaps it was a subconscious effort to give off that claustrophobic feeling in the images. (I imagine being blind (or maybe newly blinded) to be very claustrophobic. Small steps, and afraid of movement for fear of tripping/falling off a cliff/mauled by a jaguar)
...OR MAYBE JUST UNCANNY COINCIDENCE that they come off this way and he is blind. OR maybe I just read too much into stuff
OH HAY OMG THAT LITTLE cutey joobr drew is so cute I want to marry it. it looks a little like my tattoo. I wish I could tattoo that on my other arm. okay now I have gone beyond fan into scary..
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A lot of the clunky wording is really more of my thoughts rushing around and not knowing how to place them, I certainly don't want to be the new Tolkien or Lovecraft.
um um um but yes thank you so much for pointing all this out, this helps a lot not only for this piece but future pieces (of course). I wish I had a better response other than copious thank-yous!
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"They stung badly, the salt working as a sieve to clear the blood and dirt away. His cheek pressed to the sand, and the cool water came up again, filling his mouth with brine."
Aaaaah feelings like that make the words so tactile. And of course your pictures go with this like cheese goes with apples. Lovely, lovely.
S-so this is before he became all monstery and mysterious, jah 8D?
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Thank you for sharing :, ]
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