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31_days: The Soldiers

Dec 10, 2007 10:40

Title: The Soldiers
Day/Theme: December 12th / Collecting memories in a rainbow pot
Series: Princess Tutu
Character/Pairing: Fakir, Charon, Reitzel, Mytho
Rating: G

( marching as to war )

fic, 31_days, princess tutu

Comments 6

haleysings December 12 2007, 10:55:05 UTC

You don't know HOW happy I was to stumble upon this tonight. <3 I love fic that features Fakir as a child, and this was awesome. I like how you captured Fakir's serious, determined nature, but didn't forget that he was still a kid, too (like him naming the rocking horse 'clip-clop'). The rainbow jar was a great way to tie in the theme, and really gave a beautiful mental image. And you've got both Charon AND Raetzel in here, who I think are two severely underused characters in fanfic. The language does a good job of being easy to read but capturing a 'fairytale' feel...and how it ties into the fire in the end was a great way to set where the fic was, I though. So...yes, this made me very happy.

sophiap December 12 2007, 12:03:01 UTC

Beautifully done! It has the feel of a Victorian's children story, which suits the material so, so well.

mangaka_chan December 12 2007, 18:15:13 UTC

Very nicely written. It's hard for readers to remember that Fakir was a carefree kid at one point in his life, and you've captured his innocence so well here.

faded_lilac December 16 2007, 03:36:27 UTC

Yay I finally got to read this!

Fakirsocute. And angsty, poor thing.

wonderful! musicfiend1 January 21 2008, 02:40:16 UTC

Normally... I'm the type that enjoys a more *adult* touch to my fanfiction, but this was absolutely fabulous. You write very well, and capture the characterization of Fakir quite beautifully; a YOUNG Fakir at that. You'd be surprised how difficult most people find with writing fiction where a child is the main character.

Congrads on a job well done! And- a fic without Fakir/Ahiru is a nice *breath of fresh air*. (I'm diving back into that realm for a bit; hit me up if you are interested in reading some, hahaha).