Okay, I haven't been in a Japanese class in months, so feel free to ignore my advice. XD But here's just what I think...
I would use ああ、ああ or はい、はい instead of やれやれ, just because the latter I typically see as a sign of exasperation. idk, it seems like it fits better with the dismissive tone :x
And the first use of でも seems off to me... maybe try しかし?
ETA: Oh, and you don't have to use the をした form for burning. The verb is やく, so just 風間がやきました should be fine. WAIT, it's a transitive verb. omg. maybe you really don't want my advice on grammar :|
S'okay, Vivs, I'm doing this so I can learn more about casual form- we really haven't covered much about it in class + adding in structures I learned recently.
but しかし might make more sense...I don't think we actually learned that word yet, tbh. Aaaaah, and I'm going into 202 next semester, what is this. *headdesk*
UGH, I hate how they don't cover casual structures well. It's totally more useful than polite ones. ~___~
しかし just means "however". I think Veers down there had the better idea, though - だが sounds the best imo. And don't worry about being unfamiliar with vocabulary like しかし; I picked up most of the useful stuff just from listening.
Considering the character's more of a tomboy, I was told to try using masculine language, so the softer meaning wouldn't make sense? But I can see where I screwed up in the grammar. Sensei, why aren't you letting us do more casual speech, it works better for my dialogue purposes, sob.
I was copying directly out of the book for the がやきました section - though it's listed as translating to "I burned myself", so that might account for it sounding weird. But that makes sense!
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I would use ああ、ああ or はい、はい instead of やれやれ, just because the latter I typically see as a sign of exasperation. idk, it seems like it fits better with the dismissive tone :x
And the first use of でも seems off to me... maybe try しかし?
ETA: Oh, and you don't have to use the をした form for burning. The verb is やく, so just 風間がやきました should be fine. WAIT, it's a transitive verb. omg. maybe you really don't want my advice on grammar :|
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but しかし might make more sense...I don't think we actually learned that word yet, tbh. Aaaaah, and I'm going into 202 next semester, what is this. *headdesk*
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しかし just means "however". I think Veers down there had the better idea, though - だが sounds the best imo. And don't worry about being unfamiliar with vocabulary like しかし; I picked up most of the useful stuff just from listening.
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As for transitive verbs, I'm going to have to tentatively agree with you there.
LISTEN TO HER, LII, SHE SEEMS TO KNOW WHAT SHE'S TALKING ABOUT.
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I was copying directly out of the book for the がやきました section - though it's listed as translating to "I burned myself", so that might account for it sounding weird. But that makes sense!
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