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deelaundry

Commitment, 1/2 (R)

Feb 22, 2007 14:28

Posted to house_wilson and housefic

Title: Commitment, Part 1 of 2
Author: Dee Laundry
Pairing: House and Wilson
Rating: R for theme and language (no sex)
Summary: Much too much; Wilson takes a break.
Note: Takes place about two weeks after episode 3-14 “Insensitive”; spoilers to that point. Beta by the awesome daisylily. For nightdog_barks, who has always feared that Wilson will break ( Read more... )

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just_jane_doe February 22 2007, 21:57:32 UTC

Wow. Incredible. So different and so... believable. I think I'm still reeling from how far down the downward spiral Wilson is in this - I love the new perspective. You're brilliant! Can't wait to see what happens to both of them.

deelaundry February 24 2007, 19:30:22 UTC

Thanks. Wilson is definitely around the bend here. Part Two is up, if you haven't seen it.

rugby_wing10 February 22 2007, 22:17:16 UTC

Wow, Wilson does nervous breakdowns well. Or should I say you do Wilson doing nervous breakdowns well. I'm dying for the next part.

deelaundry February 24 2007, 19:31:40 UTC

Thanks. When Wilson goes, he goes all out. Part Two is up if you haven't seen it.

hry2007 February 22 2007, 22:26:47 UTC

This is really powerful, looking forward to the next part. Wilson's long due for a breakdown.

That said, I hope you don't mind a little concrit, but Wilson's speech patterns felt overexaggerated, and juvinile as opposed to nuts. I've worked in psych wards, and it didn't feel like an accurate devolution. Perhaps a better way to show his mental state would be focusing on his actions, stature, things of that sort.

deelaundry February 22 2007, 22:46:30 UTC

Don't mind concrit at all - in fact, would you be willing to take a look at the not-yet-finished Part Two? I gave you access; it's here: http://deelaundry.livejournal.com/35276.html

Thanks!

hry2007 February 22 2007, 23:07:10 UTC

Will do.

beandelphiki February 23 2007, 05:20:02 UTC

I thought some of it was supposed to sound juvenile...? Otherwise, what prompted House to ask Wilson how old he was? But it also came off to me as fluctuating between a bit juvenile and slightly manic.

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ladysarahii February 22 2007, 22:30:52 UTC

Wow, this was a difficult read, but it's so good. I can't even explain to you how hooked I was by this story. The OC is fantastic, and Wilson was oddly in character, even though he really wasn't.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

deelaundry February 24 2007, 19:35:31 UTC

Thanks so much. So glad you felt the way Wilson broke down was in character (I was worried a bit).

empressaurelius February 22 2007, 22:34:14 UTC

Ooh, Jesus. Poor Wilson. I was on the verge of tears reading this-very disturbing, and very sad. I'm on the edge of my seat for the next part.

deelaundry February 24 2007, 19:36:34 UTC

Thanks. Poor Wilson, indeed.