Soyons Amoureux

Feb 11, 2017 06:05

i'm fine                                                                     i'm just cold
          please help me                                                                                                                                               please put your ams around me

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adoptedwriter February 11 2017, 22:46:27 UTC
This beautifully illustrates the inner struggle between the need to care for oneself and the inability to say no to others who drain us or are toxic. Hugs.

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aniron_iorhael February 12 2017, 07:28:21 UTC
I really loved this. So guttingly relatable. And it's certainly the truth! All their help ever is is just shallowness, no genuine concern, just fake smiles and a nod and leave. ...

I adore this stanza. Very nicely done. :)

"because you never thank the ground
until you know how it feels to fall
and you never express how much you need the sun
until it fails to rise at all."

This struggle is certainly all too real, and you're certainly not alone in that. Much peace to you.

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bleodswean February 12 2017, 16:31:49 UTC
This was an intense read. I enjoyed the way you wove so much of your poem in and out of visuals. I especially liked this one - because you never thank the ground
until you know how it feels to fall!

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halfshellvenus February 13 2017, 08:00:37 UTC
I read this as a reflection on someone who might have committed suicide, for having given away so much love that others needed but not received it when she needed it most herself.

because you never thank the ground
until you know how it feels to fall
and you never express how much you need the sun
until it fails to rise at all.
This was wonderful, and says so much about taking things for granted-- important qualities in a person that are more rare than we realize.

learning to say a better good bye
Ouch, but what perfect phrasing of the sense that things always seem to end, no matter how they start-- or at least, that they end for you. I knew that feeling all too well, in my younger years.

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sinnamongirl February 13 2017, 08:11:56 UTC
All I saw on my screen at first was the first part, the heart-shaped "excuses" area, and that would've been enough for me to vote for you - but you kept going and got deeper and deeper; so insightful.

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