FIc: White Collar, BtVS, Better Off Ted

[daria234]

A White Collar fic here, and links to other fics at the bottom.

Title:3 Times Peter Thinks that Neal Understands Why Crime Is Wrong, and 3 Times Peter Knows Neal Doesn't. (Part I)
Fandom: White Collar
Characters: Peter and Neal, could be gen or preslash
Note: This is the first part; the first half of the title. (It's all I have written now)

Comments

[sinkwriter]

I think you have a strong handle on both of these characters, how they sound, how they behave, how they communicate with each other. I especially love the last segment and the revelation about Mozzie; I felt that was the answer to the question as soon as "Neal avoided," and I have to say, I love that little twist - I can see him trying to get through to Neal in that way. And I totally believe that Peter would be skeptical about it at first and that Neal would get a bit defensive in return. I can hear and picture them having some of these conversations.

Really well done. I look forward to the next segment of this piece! :)

[daria234]

Thanks so much - I'm really glad it felt real. I like your description of Peter and Neal when it comes to their discussions of Mozzie - skeptical vs. defensive. It works for their discussions of Mozzie on the show too!

Thanks for such nice comments :)

[elrhiarhodan]

I don't know where to begin with this - every part is so filled with awesomeness. The characters and the voices are so pitch perfect (and I know you've been writing P/N a while, and they always are, but it bears repeating).

I love the pre-series scene - because regardless of what Neal's actually thinking, no matter how terrified he may be, he's never - ever going to let that show.

The identity theft con - heart breaking, and I love how you've gotten into Peter's head. He doesn't want to be the moralist, but he can't help himself.

And the finale? Wow...that Mozzie once told Neal to go straight. I can sooooo see that - and then Moz never mentions it again.

Can't wait for more of this. You keep out-doing yourself. Which is really pretty hard.

[daria234]

Ahh, your feedback is SO very lovely. It makes me feel very encouraged :)

I really think Moz sees Neal and wants what's best for him.

And irl (without the dom-goggles) it would be callous of Peter to just constantly be on Neal's ass (ha) for how morally and generally wrong he is, but I like to think Peter is not usually self-righteous but something about Neal just brings out that side of him that wants to be able to change people into what he wants.

Again, irl bothersome, but in sexytimes, hot.

[ai_kizu]

I loved this.

I loved the part with the elderly because Neal wouldn't take from those who had.

I love that Moz tried to talk him out of it because I can imagine Moz in my head tryign to convince him.

[daria234]

Thanks so much :) :)

[tigriswolf]

Aww, lovely White Collar drabbles.

[daria234]

Thanks! :)

[non_sequential]

These are all pretty damn fantastic, but the first one just set up shop in my head. I love everything about it and I want to keep it forever.

Can't wait for Part 2!

[daria234]

Thanks so much :) I like to picture that scene but it feels SO sad, but I am SO waiting for them to show it the actual show :)