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dancinbutterfly

Venture Bros. Fic

Sep 29, 2006 14:22

Title: Venturing Forth
Fandom: The Venture Bros.
Pairing: Dean/Triana
Rating:PG-13
Warning: Unbeta'd sorry.
Summary: Triana Orpheus has a couple conversations on the compound.

( Brock's nice enough for a guy that has a license to rip out a guys spine with his bare hands. She knows, she’s seen it, the license, not the whole spine-removal thing because gross. Plus he has shit together in away the rest of the Ventures just...don't. )

fanfic, venture bros

Comments 17

glamourcorpse September 29 2006, 21:25:41 UTC

Pretty damn good and I don't usually like fanfic. I loved "because as truly *awful* as the kiss was" cute and realistic. I actually got a little teary eyed, damn you.

I want to ask though, when you wrote: " “Cause when we went on that date Brock said that I should pull out your chair or kiss your hand but if you like it, then-“

Did you mean "Brock said that I shouldn't"?

dancinbutterfly September 29 2006, 23:23:39 UTC

It should indeed read "Shouldn't" thank you very much I have now fixed it.

The problem with this peice is that I had no control over its arrival and once it got here, no one to beta it mainly because none of my friends watch VB (I. You're thinking, "well then why are you friends with them?")

So i really appreicate you point that out poilitely and I a even MORE appreicative that you too the time you reviewed. Thank you so much.

glamourcorpse September 30 2006, 01:24:37 UTC

So i really appreicate you point that out poilitely

Um yeah, it takes balls to put your stuff out there and it's even harder without a beta. That comment was completely uncalled for.

That being said force your friends to watch the show. I did it with mine. Now the majority of them are also obsessed. *snerk*

If you ever need a beta I'll have my internet back soon and can give stuff the once over for ya.

dancinbutterfly September 30 2006, 05:35:11 UTC

I would LOVE that. Thank you so much for the offer. I wrote this in class and just threw it up on LJ. I usually dont do that but this is my one exception. I'm friending you and I'll drop you a line if I write any more VB. I think I maay have to write some more T/D. I dont usually like Het but there is something about them. I dont know what.

mattdoesntcare September 29 2006, 21:35:35 UTC

MOR SUBJECT VERB AGREEEEEEEEMENT!

dancinbutterfly September 29 2006, 23:17:52 UTC

Sorry. None of my betas have seen VB and therefore refused to beta it. But hey, if you'd like to help, just say so. thanks.

radia September 30 2006, 01:10:22 UTC

Triana is just a wee bit out of character. A little too sweet and not enough of her sarcasm, but I loved her internal monologue. Great conversation with Brock, and adorable Dean.

Dean/Triana is my secret VB OTP, so this made me happy regardless. Hell, VB fic in general makes me happy. The fandom needs more. Got anymore in the works?

umbricman September 30 2006, 03:14:40 UTC

A very nice, lovely story. I'd hope SOMEDAY Dean and Triana get together-it'd be out of character for the show to show it, but I like to think it'll happen-and you did a lovely way of showing it.

Two thumbs up!

dancinbutterfly October 1 2006, 04:10:07 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you thought so.

D/T forever!

ebonystarfire September 30 2006, 05:23:50 UTC

THAT was SO CUTE that I seriously awwwed out loud...and almost got teary eyed. Beautiful stuff, great job. I adore writng Dean (er, Dean in general of course lol) but for some reason I don't feel comfortable writing Triana. I don't feel like I get to see her enough in the show to totally understand her character's personality beyond sterotypical goth chick, ya know? I really like this, though I'm not sure she'd just come out and be like Dean kiss me...but like I said I don't really feel like I understand her personality well enough to say what she'd do behind the scenes of the show. Noooot that any of this matters, it's just me rambling lol. Anyway, great job, really cute...I hope Dean gets the girl some day! :D

dancinbutterfly September 30 2006, 05:32:33 UTC

Okay, lots of things. First..the main reason I had triana ask Dean flat out to kiss he(which she didn't the first time, only the second time when he sucked cause hey, its Dean ^-~) is because dean would never, EVER have the balls to just go all out and kiss her. Nor has he ever kissed a girl before. So i took a page out of my own life. I cannot tell you the number of guys I've been the first kiss for and sometimes you have to tell them what to do. You just do. But yeah, it's just not the guy he is. Not right now anyway ( ... )

dancinbutterfly September 30 2006, 05:36:41 UTC

By the way? Love the icon

ebonystarfire September 30 2006, 06:11:36 UTC

Yeah acutally now that you bring it up, I think you're right...I think she just dresses that way for the fashion. She's not really an "emo girl" or anything. And actually to be honest...I may not fully understand her as well as Dean because I don't pay much attention to her....and constantly have my eyes....full attention...heart and soul...*ahem* set on mainly Dean lol. There, I admitted it. XD I've always wanted to make an attempt at a Triana/Dean fic but never felt I would do Triana justice when writing her. Perhaps I should do some rewatching and focus on her more to get a better feel for her.
And thanks, I asked my friend to make this icon for me...though I've noticed people snagging it here and there. In all honesty there's really nothing I can do about it heh. So if you'd like, you can snag it as well, just be sure to credit my friend phantom_pele :D