[HiruMamo Poem] Broken By Sin

[damn2es1mutt]

Hell's fury hath desire,

Burning high as a funeral pyre.

But alas 'tis reborn,

In the eye of a woman's scorn.

And in the breath of Satan's last,

His love has turned to putrid ash.

But her blue eyes his love for long,

The echo of his horrid wrong.

He admits to no one still,

The hatred of that earthly thrill.

And ne'er again shall he see,

She who's lover he

Comments

[13mirror]

;___; I'm usually not that into poems but you had me to tears with this one!!! ...
<3 It's like the purest jet tainted love in words <3
Thanks for sharing this! ;3

i wanna be your friend.. lalala

[zo_o_freak]

heia dude! dudette?!

anyway, i've added you already as a friend.. you didnt have any choice, hahaha

i was just browsing through my friends' page then.. i found out you are Scrunchy!!! Scrunchy! Scrunchy!

hehehe

and also that we share a lot in common: caffeine, dogs, football, and well, ES21

however, i love cats, as evident in my userpic.. but i hope this will not affect our acquaintance

and oh, you write poetry..! really nice..
i write some "poetry" (don't really knw if that's what you can call 'em) too, though not abt ES21

anyway, i'll read you around..???

Re: i wanna be your friend.. lalala

[damn2es1mutt]

"Dudette" I do not mind being called a "dude" everynow and then, however. ^_^ I call everyone regardless of gender "dude" alot.

I hate cats... they're... just, no.... I don't do cats. It will have no affect on our accuaintance, though. I don't discriminate between favorite animals =D

It would be "poems". And I'm glad that you like my poetry. ^_^

[reya_smiles]

Wow, this is good. Though is it supposed to be Hiruma looking back on what could have been or him just hesitating on what could be. While reading I got an idea of both happening. Either way, really nicely done! Great job! ^_~

[damn2es1mutt]

Thank you ^_^ Him hesitating on what could be was my initial goal.

[cherry_tiger]

Really nicely done! It's never easy to write a poem for a pairing, especially without going out of focus since poems do tend to do that. But yours captured Hiruma and his thoughts really well, of his "condition" and his "feelings". Again, nicely done! ^^