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cynicalpirate

I need to not add ells to names where there is no additional ell.

Jul 25, 2006 18:10

title: gillian trelawney and her weird and wonderful weather forecast, chapter 3
rating: R for the word fuck quite a lot, and a sudden inexplicable VEER away from fluff
pairing and other things you should know: remus/sirius, smoking!remus, bad writing, dubious consent but he likes it really, the aforementioned VEER.
previous parts: part one, part ( Read more... )

fic

Comments 26

pforte July 25 2006, 18:02:31 UTC

You are evil. Evil and great.
I love your descriptive style, e.g. There were mouthwash streaks down the side of the sink, slippery crumbs of soap bars sticking to the walls and glistening tangles of coarse boy-hair trying to swirl their way down the plughole.
I love this story, especially because we have a heat wave too, and I feel exactly like them. And your Remus is so gorgeously in love and the heat makes them tetchy and apathetic and *sigh*...it's awesome. You would be truly evil if you didn't update before this heat wave ends. ;)

cynicalpirate August 11 2006, 20:15:29 UTC

I think the heatwave is over now (at least here) but I'm really pleased you liked it. And weren't revolted by the boy-hair. ♥

Sorry for horrendously late reply, was AWOL for a while.

aquila_star July 25 2006, 20:09:15 UTC

Wow, this is great. I love the visulas, an the emotion from Remus is practically palpable. Well done.

cynicalpirate August 12 2006, 16:52:30 UTC

Thank you!

paraserpiente July 25 2006, 23:36:49 UTC

Tee! I enjoy this immensely. Especially considering the enormous heatwave my own area has been experiencing. -.- 109 degrees farenheit--what is going ON here?

cynicalpirate August 12 2006, 16:53:08 UTC

Heatwaves = good initially, but then they start to grate. Glad you enjoyed!

cowgirl_ed763 July 26 2006, 00:20:47 UTC

dear lord. (first timer here - love at first sight, apparently.) let me praise you *bows on hands and knees*

i was reading the second bit (didn't realize there was a first part until i came to the link that said 'part the third') and i was like OOOH there's more! o god. this is sooooo good.

and i've been riffling through the rest of the things that you have here and its really good. on a level that's positively orgasmic.

just to let you know ;)

cynicalpirate August 12 2006, 16:54:30 UTC

*enjoys being praised*

I'm really glad you're liking it so far. And I'm really happy you enjoyed the fic, so much l♥ve. Thanks for bothering to comment.

cowgirl_ed763 August 13 2006, 21:57:06 UTC

"bothering"?
i only comment on things if they're worthwhile. and your stuff is definately worthwhile.

XD

penguin88 July 26 2006, 02:34:04 UTC

“It would be easier if we had this conversation while we were clothed.”

It would be easier if we didn’t have to have this conversation.

“We could get under the covers,” Remus suggested. Sirius nodded. They silently pulled back the duvet and ensconced themselves between it and the mattress. It was hot and itchy. Unbearably so. They leaned back against the headboard. Remus wiped a bead of sweat off his forehead.

Ah, yes. Boys are best when they are awkward and emotionally challenged, no? *grin*

I also liked this: “Oh good,” Remus said sourly, putting his head in his hands. “You like me. Otherwise you really would be a complete shit. I’m such a fool.”I love it when Remus becomes all stroppy and sarcastic. Both of the boys sound great. You always stick to your characterizations - something that I greatly admire. Both of them are boys and therefore supremely emotionally dense - I love the way that you show their inability to understand each other clearly or to talk about such an awkward subject. Sirius is truly a great annoying arse ( ... )