FIC: (Star Wars) Walking the Fine Line - Obi-Wan/Anakin

[cupiscent]

TITLE: Walking the Fine Line
AUTHOR: Dee

PAIRING: Obi-Wan/Anakin
RATING: Adult (themes, language, sex, masochism)
SUMMARY: Anakin gets captured, Obi-Wan rescues him, and the aftermath would be ridiculous if it weren't so troubling.
NOTES: Silly porn. But I hope I'm still telling truths about these characters. Thanks to calicokat for her inspirational words

Comments

[kraken_wakes]

God, that's achingly subtle and blindingly hot and oddly beautiful. Wow.

*rereads*

[cupiscent]

You were the first feedback to come through last night, just before I logged off, so you sent me to bed grinning. ...er, in as non-porny a way as something relating to this fic can be. *G*

Seriously, thanks.

omg

[dot1628]

Wow.

Just...wow.

I trying to think of ways to be coherent when telling you why I loved this story so much. Okay. Your writing is very lyrical and has a wonderful flow to it. Nothing seemed to be going too fast or too slow and your attention to detail was great. Some of the really tiny things that were slotted in were the ones that got me the most, carried so much meaning in one sentence. The meditation scene was my favourite. Beautiful.

Your characterisation is brilliant, expecially Obi-wan's reluctance, coupled with his desire and his need to help Anakin.

I don't know what else to say, except for that you have a new fangirl and I want to have your babies.

Re: omg

[cupiscent]

Incoherency is its own compliment, but thank you for taking the time and effort to give me these lovely comments. It really means a lot to me to hear that it works for you, the details of it. In fact, I do a mad happy dance. *G* (Especially the little things. They're frequently things that have amused or interested or particularly caught me as I was writing, and it's great to know they're appreciated.)

[cupiscent]

Eee. I'm just so happy to hear that, all of it. Especially re: the sex, because that's usually the first thing I lose perspective on. It becomes just words, and I become convinced it's the least sexy thing ever recorded in the history of mankind, and... Yeah, so it's nice to hear. Thank you!

[avlyn_naturae]

The language was beautiful to read - it was descriptive and flowing and I was simply compelled to read it word for word. What about another couple of stories? I do not mind reading pieces with languages like this - not at all.

[cupiscent]

LOL. Whee, thank you! That's the sort of thing it does a girl good to hear.

(As for more stories - for now, there's just the stuff I've written previously. There's a link to my website - Furtive Scribblings - in the sidebar. *points*)

[ladyjestyr]

Oh, Dee. It's beautiful.

I know it gave you trouble in the birthing, but it was worth it. Wow.

Um. More squee and flailing later. For now, I will sit here gape-mouthed and just adore your brilliance some more.

[ladyjestyr]

And now I have some words back:

His eyes were open, and he was seeing again, though balanced yet in internal stillness. The sunlight had shifted. The time that had past was almost visible in the room, like unravelled twine. Anakin, opposite him, was a pillar of dark silence in its spangled, spun tangle

That. That, right there is the point where I went from "Wow, this is as good as ever" to "omgflailflailflail". Your writing has grown so very rich and complicated; it's deliciously easy to read, but still rewards re-reading and savouring.

[cupiscent]

Orright, I am so serious about the hugginess now. In fact, consider yourself metaphorically glomp-tackled and squeed all over. Because oh, Elle, you do make me make the fists of incoherent glee and the high-pitched squeal and all.

Which is a totally childish reaction to being told I write like a grown up, but I can't help it. *G*

All worth it. Every bit of aggravation and every time head met keyboard in the writing of it. It's all worth it for this.