FIC: (Star Wars) Walking the Fine Line - Obi-Wan/Anakin

[cupiscent]

TITLE: Walking the Fine Line
AUTHOR: Dee

PAIRING: Obi-Wan/Anakin
RATING: Adult (themes, language, sex, masochism)
SUMMARY: Anakin gets captured, Obi-Wan rescues him, and the aftermath would be ridiculous if it weren't so troubling.
NOTES: Silly porn. But I hope I'm still telling truths about these characters. Thanks to calicokat for her inspirational words

Comments

[jennyagain]

eep eep eep!

(the preceeding noises have been brought to you by an incoherent and thrilled jennyagain.)

i love what you've done here, the ebb and flow of it all, the lyrical storytelling, the intentional smattering of little details in all the right places. this is so clearly, cleanly, beautifully your work, and i love it (as you well know by now).

obi-wan at the end? o.m.g. all i wanted and more.

i am yours forever.

::kneels in anakin-like supplication::

[cupiscent]

I did it? I did what you wanted? *eager and puppyish; frolic, frolic*

I was so anguished. You were so right. It was what it needed. Thank you for making me do it. Love.

*gathers you up and gives you the universe, Palpatine-like*

[cupiscent]

Honestly, it's all just a long and convoluted excuse to get Anakin collared. Because OMG YES PLS. (Also, if Obi-Wan had kept him on a leash, it all would have turned out very different. *G*)

Translation from the silly: Thank you for the lovely feedback!

[chaosmanor]

That was gorgeous, and I just loved the way you exploited POV to show Obi-Wan's conflict.

There, I said something observant and literary, now I get to enthuse about the drawn-out tension of the piece, and the understated sex scene.

Wonderful.

[cupiscent]

Muahaha. Sometimes I think I live to exploit POV. No, seriously, it's always the first thing I want to do with anything. Idea! and then, sneaky!

Ahem. *G* You make me a happy camper, Elaine. Thank you.

[littlewings04]

Fantastic, just fantastic. Lyrical and beautiful and so intense. The way you used colour in particular was moving, deeply moving. Guh. I loved it beyond words.

[cupiscent]

Oh hee. Thank you so much! Delightful feedback like this makes all the aggravation worth it. Not to mention making my day bright and happy.

[ex_condemn160]

Oh...oh my god. That was, that was, wow, just wow. I'm breathless. It was incredible. Everything about it was wonderful. Gosh, that was great. The characterization, the collar, the everything. All very well put together and beautifully written. Wonderful, just wonderful.

[cupiscent]

Thank you so much. It's been an awfully long and aggravating time in the writing, but every moment and stress of it is well and truly worth it for happy-making feedback like this. Thanks!