Slash fic: "Real Time" by cupidsbow

[cupidsbow]

Title: Real Time
Author: cupidsbow
Fandom: Dogma
Pairing: Loki/Bartleby
Rating: NC-17
For: j_crew_guy, I hope you like it.
Length: 1,200 words
Disclaimer: Dogma doesn't belong to me, and nor does the Bible. Please take this story in the spirit in which it's intended: as an affectionate riff on a work of satire.
Notes: This was written for the Afflection Remix 2005;

Comments

[rubynye]

WOW.

Dogma is one of my favorite movies, and I always wondered what that moment was like for Loki, losing his wings.

What an illumination of it.

*wow*.

This is beautiful, dense, and awesome. And I'm glad I found it by websurfing.

[cupidsbow]

Thank you so much for your comment. It's my first try at a remix, so it's lovely to know it works.

[ireth]

OMG... jeez. Incredible. I love the way Loki feels everything so deeply nwo that he has a new understanding of it *awed*

[cupidsbow]

Thank you for the lovely feedback!

[dhyi]

I love the fact you went for the Bible. That's perfect! I always think it is the most poetic thing to read. :D

[cupidsbow]

Thank you! I was a little tentative about using the Bible, actually, but it just seemed so *right* for Loki. I'm really glad it worked for you, too. :)

[fran_de_sales]

To no longer being just one thing swirled around at fate's whim, but to split into parts; pieces of him spinning off into time, one after another in chains of blood and genes and life. Lord, sugar. That sure took my breath away. The way you just get *inside* those emotions and spill them out is stunning. You write Loki so well, and, because I know what's coming for him, my heart is just breaking by your last line.

*kisses*

[cupidsbow]

*mwah*

I'm so glad you liked it, love. I was feeling a bit angsty about it, never having tried a remix before. But in the end, Loki just jumped up and down in my head, saying "me, me, *me*" and the story practically wrote itself :)

[lardencelover]

This is amazing. I wish I could manage better feedback than that, but there's so much going on emotionally and mentally and spiritually in this that I need some time to digest it before I even work out what I've walked away with.

[cupidsbow]

Thank you so much for letting me know you enjoyed this fic. It's one of those stories that's never received much feedback, so I'm particularly happy when someone lets me know they like it.

I've often wondered if I didn't quite nail it, but I can't bering myself to get too het up about it--this story was so interesting to write; I actually re-read the Bible before writing it, and I was surprised by some of the things I found. And the Psalms! I'd forgotten how lovely some of them are! So the story is something of a favourite of mine. Thanks again for letting me know you enjoyed it.

[lardencelover]

Oh, you nailed it, easily. This is the Dogma fic I've been wanting to write but just lacked the capability/talent to do. At least one of us got it right.

[cupidsbow]

You sweet talker! :)