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cs_whitewolf

TWFanFic: Uniformed Man [Jack/Jack]

Aug 13, 2007 02:20

Title: Uniformed Man

On Website: beyond-redemption.net

Rating(s): R/18-Rated

Pairing(s): Jack Harkness/Jack Harkness (“James Harper”)

Summary: Unbetad. James finds the sight of Jack in his uniform truly irresistible.

Word Count: 1210words.

Dedication: For gauky_1976, who pestered me into writing a longer (and, ahem, more detailed) version of my uniform ( Read more... )

[&]: [m/m]: jack harkness/real!jack, fic: verse: anywhere is, fanfic: torchwood

Comments 40

adafrog August 13 2007, 02:34:46 UTC

Oh wow. Love it.

cs_whitewolf August 13 2007, 08:27:00 UTC

Thank you! Very glad to hear so :D

fajrdrako August 13 2007, 02:43:37 UTC

Excellent - and very sexy. There'sa gorgeous intensity to it. My favourite passage is:“Will you do that for me, Jack?” James asked, as if Jack really had a choice. “Will you sully your uniform, for me?”

“Oh… yes…” Jack gasped out hoarsely, unable to deny James, not even for the sake of his uniform- new and crisp and yet to be worn out in the glare of the public.

cs_whitewolf August 13 2007, 08:28:51 UTC

:) thank you!

I have to admit, the idea of Jack sullying his uniform does wicked things to my imagination- I'm really pleased you enjoyed that passage, it was certainly an interesting part to write!

Peace,
CS WhiteWolf

fajrdrako August 13 2007, 10:43:23 UTC

The 'sullying the uniform' thing is very sexy conceptually and visually - and it's a strong concept for both characters, in what it says about them. Yes, well done.

cs_whitewolf August 13 2007, 12:57:16 UTC

::very big grin::

It's a concept I'd most dearly love to explore a bit more ;D

Thanks again, babes!

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gauky_1976 August 13 2007, 04:05:11 UTC

Uhh...Guh...

Very hot and well worth the wait!!

Will write more when I can string more than two words together and am not drowning in a pool of drool!!

gauky_1976 August 13 2007, 07:44:16 UTC

Just a small nit-pick though..

James paused only slightly, flicking his eyes forward to see James’ expression in the mirror.

Should that read Jack's expression in the mirror??

cs_whitewolf August 13 2007, 08:33:03 UTC

Woah, I'm actually impressed it was James' name I cocked up XD I kept writing "Jack did this to Jack erm, James" and had to go back and edit most of it, lol.

Thanks for pointing it out. It's all fixed now :)

cs_whitewolf August 13 2007, 08:30:59 UTC

I found myself stalling on this piece as I was feeling somewhat rusty when it came to writing the higher rating- so-so pleased to hear that it's worked out okay for you :D and that you enjoyed it!

::pets the pile of goo::
Peace,
CS WhiteWolf

Thread 10

gemini72au August 13 2007, 04:30:54 UTC

Very sexy! That was wonderfully written.

cs_whitewolf August 13 2007, 08:33:57 UTC

::grins::

Thanks, darling! Am very pleased you liked it!

Peace,
CS WhiteWolf

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cs_whitewolf August 13 2007, 20:19:05 UTC

::smishes you tight::

Gosh, I feel a bit silly that I didn't intend anything like that when I wrote it. But I guess when reading over it you can see how it would be an issue of trust and just how much they're able to give up/in to each other.

Thanks for such an inspiring comment, darling!
Peace,
Campaspe