[Fic] Abide in Me (Sadafons/Ed, NC-17)

[cryogenia]

Title: Abide in Me
Author: cryogenia
Pairing: Sadafons/Ed
Rating: NC-17
Genre: Horror
Warning: Dubcon/coercion
A/N: hime1999 is a foul enabler. If you don't know who Sadafons is er...be aware that the genre here is indeed horror XDDD

Comments

[engine_blue]

Strangle Al! do it, do it I say! bwa ha ha--

er, i mean... >_>...

Anywho, such an interesting concept. I like how it's different than recent writings. And I really love the picture I got of the apartment and the room. Your descriptions managed to conjure more dirt and depression of the place than I would have normally assigned to it. Very cool!

[hieronymousb]

Dude, how is it that I somehow failed to review this fic before? Huh. Well, I was in the mood to read some horror this morning, so I went back and re-read this fic. It's creepy, I grant you, but you know, more than creepy, I think it carries a certain lingering sense of sadness; hope turned to ruination and wistfulness, mourning, the feeling of wanting something but knowing that you can never truly have it except in echoes.

Somewhere along the road to heaven, Alfons's soul had gotten lost, and the horrors of this world are just as real, Ed is finding, as the ones he thought that he had left behind.

This line hit me like you wouldn't believe, especially the image of Alfons's soul getting "lost on the road to heaven". Very evocative.

Something else that struck me was --

He touches his hand to the crumbling wallpaper and follows by sheer touch to make the appropriate turn. (Alfons never did get those tears replaced.)You know, I originally read "tears" as being the leaky eye emissions, then realized what you actually meant, but I

[darkblysse]

Oh, wow. What an amazing concept! And you wrote it so well, too. I'm really left speechless, after reading this. :O

[cryogenia]

Thank you - I'm glad you liked it. The original concept of Sadafons comes from hime1999; I just implemented it XD

[darkblysse]

I still don't understand what Sadafons means... XD Explanation, please? >_>;; *Is kinda-half-asleep.*

[cryogenia]

Have you ever watched the movie "The Ring"? It's about a creepy vengeful spirit named Sadako. hime1999 drew a picture of Alfons in the same situation, and christened it Sadafons XD