Comments | cryogenia: [Fic] A History of Violence, Chapter 5

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[Fic] A History of Violence, Chapter 5

Feb 05, 2006 05:39

Title: A History of Violence
Author: cryogenia
Rating: R, for language and violence
Genre: Gen, Prisonfic
A/N: ZEP!

( A History of Violence, Chapter Five )

fanfic, elric brothers, prison fic, gen

Comments 70

sky_dark February 5 2006, 14:28:12 UTC

Unmitigated, unrival, pure and utter LOVE for this Al. *licks*

cryogenia February 5 2006, 16:16:30 UTC

XD So far, you're the only one :) Everyone else is hating him so hard, it's hilarious :D

squirrelarmy February 5 2006, 16:27:27 UTC

I do so LOVE IT when Al shows off the fact that he is indeed an Elric and raises holy hell. It's so unexpected and FANTASTIC. And I love how this plot just twists and turns and works itself into new places. ^__^ It's wonderful.

...and holy shit, Al's going to go see Mustang. Words cannot express my excitement for that scene. ^__^

One typo I noticed, so you know: “…do we eveb have a choice?” Edward groaned. I'm assuming the 'b' is misplaced. ^_^

cryogenia February 5 2006, 16:50:22 UTC

Thanks, typo is fixed.

And glad you liked Al! A lot of people are hating on him for being so irrational, but hey - he's idealistic and 16 (for the second time around); that's not a good combination XD; He's sailing into this with guns BLAZING.

conch_fritter February 5 2006, 16:31:06 UTC

Every chapter is suspenseful! I think all of your charactierizations are wonderful - Al was always quite capable of kicking serious ass when he wanted to. I can't wait for the next bit!! *angsts*

cryogenia February 5 2006, 16:54:05 UTC

Glad you are enjoying! Thanks for letting me know :) I love asskicking!Al :)

reikah February 5 2006, 16:48:09 UTC

I always love Al, it's a given. But right now I love him even more. ♥

cryogenia February 5 2006, 16:54:44 UTC

Yay! I support Al-love as well! :D

reikah February 5 2006, 17:14:46 UTC

He's so fluffy and worried and adorable, yesyes. Al-love for the win! :D

OOh--! anonymous February 5 2006, 17:33:39 UTC

eee, Al, you're so...so...different! *cry!!* zooficz are coming to mind here. . . . ^>__x

erm, a couple of typos...there's one sentence that goes of into no where when he's looking at the driver of the truck. ( ._.) don't you hate those? ^^; stupid internet.

erm, DAMN< I REALLY just want Ed to get back to normal! Poor traumatized kid. The thing is, I hate the way you've all weaved it so that he would get that affected by prison. Because he really wouldn't, IF he had thought he would get out someday. But he didn't. And OH what have you all done?? I lament!! The lamentations!!! *headdesk ( ... )

Re: OOh--! cryogenia February 6 2006, 01:27:32 UTC

Hey -
Thanks for the comment, there are certain things about the chapter that suck, and I appreciate you noticing them :) Though I'll point out that actually, this fic is a sequel to vikki's prisonfic - have you read that? The full index is located here. If you're wanting to know why Ed is as fucked up as he is - I got him this way XD

Re: OOh--! engine_blue February 6 2006, 02:24:26 UTC

yeah, I know. . . . I commented on them!

What I said was that I would normally disagree with the way he's been written, except for the one thing you used to justify it. It's a compliment. It just bugs me that Ed can't be the person I want him to be, so I read pining for resolution, yah? It's okay if the message didn't get read right. I do that all the time, especially if the paragraphs are more than two sentences. ^^; I just don't try to break up my sentences like I should here.

erm, yeah...and I got an lj!

Re: OOh--! cryogenia February 6 2006, 03:15:00 UTC

*nods*

Well, I agree - normally Ed is more resilient, too. But I read vikki's prisonfic and believed in it, so even if it makes my head spin I will do my best! Huzzah! :D

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