fic: hanging on the shadow of our family tree, lost, jack/claire, r

[crickets]

hanging on the shadow of our family tree
lost, jack/claire, 1130 words, r
post-finale, estab, no reset, inspired by this song (thanks to falseeeyelashes ♥!)
written for slybrunette

Comments

[gigglemonster]

Aw this is fantastic!
Jack is JESUS! I LOVE it lol ;)
This whole thing makes me really happy actually! That whole section about people finding out who they really are, Claire telling Jack he's beautiful because of his honesty. I love that so much, so perfect!
Also smokin'! You brought out that frantic, needy feel to it really well.
And yay for them getting a good ending :)
♥!!

[crickets]

Well not entirely Jesus, but...

Thank you! I don't know how to respond to this. I just wrote it so I'm still processing. I'm glad you liked it! Hah, okay I knew I had to work some sexy stuff in here so there it is.

For a while this had no plot, it was just Jack and Claire doing it in windows. *nods*

But then the deeper, more important stuff finally came to me. Uh huh.

the scathing comment i just promised

[slybrunette]

TV On The Radio, what up! (aka i love that song)

I'm not a hundred percent sure I've ever seen J/C, but in Australia instead of LA. Maybe I'm forgetting something, but I was instantly intrigued by this change of pace. The last two lines of the first section are perfect, and she's right he is easy.

She closes her eyes, doesn't look at the blackness of the windows, but she feels the eyes of the city on them, relishes in exposing to the rest of the world this secret that they keep so close. It somehow legitimizes what they are, makes them real. She wonders if Jack feels the same, wonders if that's why he never reaches for a light switch.

Dude, that's pure poetry and so damn beautiful. The image of them with the windows open and lights on, daring people to look, almost showing off. They damn well really can't do that in public considering, and I love the bit of defiance here. Your Claire is very vivid, vibrant, more so than on the show, in the way that I enjoy her.

I also love that you managed to work Sawyer in here. Of course.

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Re: the scathing comment i just promised

[crickets]

Yeah I'm pretty sure I've never seen them in this setting either. I thought it would be something different so I went for it. Glad it worked!

I am so glad you liked the window thing. I felt iffy about it, but it kind of came to me when I was going to sleep last night. Actually, the line "Claire craves him" came first and then the window thing came later. I was trying to form a fic around the first thing. Heh.

I'm glad the dialogue worked. When I first started, there was practically no dialogue at all, but I managed to squeeze some out, heh. (Hence sparse and short, it's my specialty.)

I am so thrilled you like this, and I promise more is coming tomorrow. I just couldn't push through and had to work on something else.

[daybreak777]

I love this world you create for them. Kinda don't want it to end for me or for them. It seems very private and intense in a way living on the island never got to be. I missed Sawyer a little bit but only a little. ;)

For a while this had no plot, it was just Jack and Claire doing it in windows. *nods*
This would have been totally fine with me. :-)

[crickets]

Thank you my dear! I kind of missed Sawyer too, but I did squeeze him in a tiny bit. Consider it a shout-out. Heh. But this was really their story. I really have fun writing them, I don't know why.

This would have been totally fine with me. :-) Hee! Good to know. If only I was better at writing smut I would totally write Jack/Claire in windows all the time. ♥!

[jaydblu]

This is really very good! I like the atmosphere and the world you've created for them.

[crickets]

Well thank you very much. And thanks for taking the time to read and review! :) Much appreciated.

[angela_weber]

*curls up in a ball and lives in fic* This is so beautiful. Your writing style is fantastic--it's really poetic and lyrical without being too much; so easy to get lost in. I really love the world you've constructed here, how it's so easy and normal and yet not, because it's them, and they're never going to be quite normal.

For so long on that island, everyone told themselves that they were finding out what and who they really were. But that's not the truth. Because the truth is they only found out who they were in the worst of times. But what about the best of times? And what about those mundane moments that make up so much of their lives? Who are they then? And which one is more truthful?

That's a really lovely paragraph because there is so much truth to it--haha, bad word choice, but that's really how I feel about it. We've seen these characters go through so much, in so many different situations--which version is the right one?

Gah. This is really wonderful. I seriously loved it.

[crickets]

*curls up in a ball and lives in fic*

I think you just epitomized my total goal when writing most fics. Hee.

And yes, sadly, they will never be normal. Well, at least they can be their own special kind of normal.

Thank you so, so much for reading this and leaving such lovely feedback. Really means a lot to me! :)