fic: hanging on the shadow of our family tree, lost, jack/claire, r
hanging on the shadow of our family tree
lost, jack/claire, 1130 words, r
post-finale, estab, no reset, inspired by this song (thanks to falseeeyelashes ♥!)
written for slybrunette
( claire craves him )
I'm not a hundred percent sure I've ever seen J/C, but in Australia instead of LA. Maybe I'm forgetting something, but I was instantly intrigued by this change of pace. The last two lines of the first section are perfect, and she's right he is easy.
She closes her eyes, doesn't look at the blackness of the windows, but she feels the eyes of the city on them, relishes in exposing to the rest of the world this secret that they keep so close. It somehow legitimizes what they are, makes them real. She wonders if Jack feels the same, wonders if that's why he never reaches for a light switch.
Dude, that's pure poetry and so damn beautiful. The image of them with the windows open and lights on, daring people to look, almost showing off. They damn well really can't do that in public considering, and I love the bit of defiance here. Your Claire is very vivid, vibrant, more so than on the show, in the way that I enjoy her.
I also love that you managed to work Sawyer in here. Of course.
"You're a doctor, Jack. It's what you are."
"Not what I am," Jack says, brushes her hair from her face.
"Well what then?" Claire asks.
"I don't know," he says.
Hello totally conflicted truth. It's sparse, short lines, but they say so damn much.
I love that he becomes a carpenter, and this little life they settle into, unsure of anything but that it works right now, and right now is good enough. I love that sentiment, this living in the moment.
This was wonderful, thank you so much! You did a fabulous job!
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I am so glad you liked the window thing. I felt iffy about it, but it kind of came to me when I was going to sleep last night. Actually, the line "Claire craves him" came first and then the window thing came later. I was trying to form a fic around the first thing. Heh.
I'm glad the dialogue worked. When I first started, there was practically no dialogue at all, but I managed to squeeze some out, heh. (Hence sparse and short, it's my specialty.)
I am so thrilled you like this, and I promise more is coming tomorrow. I just couldn't push through and had to work on something else.
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