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your story kidouchi January 28 2009, 13:56:41 UTC
I am in love with your story , I like one broken Ianto , please write soon.

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Re: your story criccieth January 28 2009, 14:36:00 UTC
bows.

Thank you! The first comment - yay!

This whole thing sort of grew from what was going to be a throw-away line in a post-Countrycide fic. Then I got the first paragraph and it sort of grew from there.

I'll be making a start on Part 4 soon, and will be re-visiting Ianto's past quite a few times over his POV pieces. In the meantime. thanks for the comment and hope you enjoyed the other two chapters as well!

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liss76 January 28 2009, 15:56:46 UTC
Enjoying this -- hope you keep it going. :)

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criccieth January 28 2009, 20:56:48 UTC
thank you! This one took ages to write - hoping the next piece won't take quite so long!
But I have general ideas for quite a few more chapters, so hopefully will be able to keep it going.

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missthingsplace January 28 2009, 21:05:53 UTC
At last i got time to read this in one go! I absolutely loved this, so much detail ... can't wait for the next part.

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criccieth January 28 2009, 21:48:24 UTC
thank you! Glad to hear the detail was good, as opposed to boring or overwhelming!

This is the problem with it being such a huge post - people are going to see the word count and think "maybe tomorrow night"! But I wanted to give people fair warning about the sheer damn length. It's the fic that wouldn't stop - I actually had to cut three entire scenes (but as they were more backstory, I can use them in later episodes!)

next part will be along in a while - as in a few weeks (I DON'T write fast!) If you've not read them before, the other parts might fill some of that time!

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missthingsplace January 28 2009, 22:36:54 UTC
I loved all the back and forth between past and present, and the detail was perfect.

I just had to find the time, i wanted to read it all in one go and this evening was perfect, i actually had it open in a tab on my laptop so i didn't lose track of it!

I have read the others, but i may reread them again ... i have next week off work and intend to use it well, reading and writing!

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criccieth January 28 2009, 22:46:40 UTC
glad to hear I've been a source of entertainment for the evening. The present-tense isn't how I normally write but it's how chapter one started to write itself and it means I can swtich to past-tense for flashbacks and hopefully it's obvious I'm swtiching from one to the other. Had to pick my moments of when to do it so I didn't break the flow of the story, but hopefully it worked.

Next piece is Jack's POV and then it's onto to "Seduce".

thanks again for reading and commenting!

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used_songs January 31 2009, 00:51:55 UTC
You posted it! I like the flow in this fic; the back and forth between past and present works really well.

I'm looking forward to seeing Jack's POV and finding out about that mysterious voice.

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criccieth January 31 2009, 01:21:08 UTC
WEll, Jack's POV piece won't cover the same time frame, but I am picking up right where we left him.

The voice however, won't get covered for a long time. Though thinking about it, I need to write that story some time before I finish First Time....

glad to hear the back and forth works. Got a few more flashbacks for Ianto (you remember the piece I cut) but they won't continue throughout the whole thing: he has to move on, after all and of course he's had two years with Lisa to cushion the bad memories.

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alba17 January 31 2009, 02:37:59 UTC
I really love this. It took me awhile to read. Strangely enough, I was checking your page to see if you had updated and I'd missed it, the very same night you posted about trying to post it all. I've re-read the first 2 installment a few times, actually, and was hoping, hoping, that you were really going to continue, and boy, did you! This is really fantastic. The amount of detail in the backstory is wonderful, lots of depth. It was hard to read about Ianto's abusive past, but you wrote it very well. I'd really like to read about how he and Oliver got together initially, I hope that's one of the things you have planned for future installments. The action sequences are very well written, lots of suspense and it really draws you in. I'm glad you gave Ianto some good relationships too, not just Oliver. One of my personal kinks about Ianto is that I like him to be bisexual in the past before Jack, so you provided that in spades, which made me very happy. Ooh, and the thing about the compound he injects - wow, really interesting. ( ... )

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criccieth January 31 2009, 10:39:31 UTC
way-hey! Really happy to know people are actually checking to see if I update! (and re-reading when I haven't!) Sorry it took so long but you can see how much I ended up writing! I never stopped writing it, just took forever to finish it and then get it to a postable-quality ( ... )

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alba17 January 31 2009, 14:01:55 UTC
Well, I didn't even mention how great your explanations were for what happened in Fragments! The explanation for the pteradactyl (or whatever,haha) was perfect, and great description of how Ianto caught it, etc. And I loved the scene where Jack stops the SUV in front of Ianto and they go off to catch Myfanwy (well, the whole pteradactyl scene is one of my very favs out of all TW anyway and I always loved the shot with Ianto's butt in front of the SUV and then Jack's double take when Ianto asks him if he's not going to help him catch the dino -I'm still hoping to fit that shot of Ianto's butt in front of SUV into a video somehow, hehe ( ... )

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criccieth February 15 2009, 23:44:46 UTC
I'm clearly losing it, because I would have sworn I replied to this a day or so after you posted it ( ... )

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