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[creativestreet]

The writing guideline for this piece: two characters are alive after the world has been attacked by zombies.

I'm grateful for all critique.  Tear it apart.

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[creativestreet]

Zombies :) Chloe is with an h, isn't it... The trunk is the only place where the zombies wouldn't see them! You know, I was wondering about the bathroom too. Especially after drinking a lot of water. Pee in a bottle? But then I thought that I might be thinking through details too much.

And, I think you're right about building the tension of survival -- honoring the world they're in. Earning trust. It means reworking the piece. Someone else suggested that there are too many gaps that the reader has to fill in. Like, it'd be good to have a scene where they're setting up camp.

You rock :)

I wanna read your zombie story :)

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[creativestreet]

http://community.livejournal.com/writingfeedback/725274.html