OOC; Application for magicdraft

[coolguysangel]

PLAYER INFORMATIONNAME: Mippa
AGE: 28
JOURNAL: mippa
AIM/PLURK/EMAIL: mippachan/Mippa/mippachan@gmail.com
CURRENT CHARACTERS: None
CHARACTER INFORMATIONSERIES: Detective Conan
NAME: Ran Mouri
RACE: Human
AGE: 17
CANON POINT: Post Holmes Revelation Arc (episode 621)
REFERENCES: Here's a Wiki!
GENDER: Female
APPEARANCE: Ran Mouri is a tall, long-legged Japanese high-

Comments

[magicdrafters]

REVISIONS
The mods feel that though your app is strong, some adjustments need to be made. Please address the following points required for clarification:
● Would like to see an explanation on how you feel Ran will excel at dueling but not Defense against the Dark Arts and Charms. Both of those core classes are an intricate part of learning spells that help people excel at dueling. Remember to keep in mind that charms has nothing to do with emotional manipulation when considering your explanation.

● If you do alter Ran's class strength and weaknesses due to the request above, please make sure to expand on what other spells and classes she will have trouble with.

● We would also like to a see an amended third person sample that includes Ran's outer voice.

Please reply with your revisions as a comment to this comment within 72 hours so that the mods can see the changes made to your app. Thank you!

REVISIONS: Favorite Classes

[coolguysangel]

Favorite:

Potions - While Ran doesn't like all aspects of her potions class, it's one that she's pretty good at, thanks to her prolonged experience in the kitchen. Once she gains a firm grasp of ingredients and how they react to each other, Ran can get creative and holds a strong intuition for what will come of the potions she sets out to make. She is also extremely patient, which is a crucial quality for successful potion-makers. While she doesn't necessarily get on with the professor all that well, she manages to avoid sticking out, therefore keeping the peace.

Flying - Once Ran gets over her initial fear of elevating on a broom, Ran's physical prowess would allow her to be a strong flyer. She isn't a reckless flyer, which keeps her in good graces with the instructors. Her biggest struggle is when she's presented with a challenge that could be perceived as risky in any sort. When pushed, however, Ran will overcome and typically do well in flying. She is not immune to accidents, though.

Charms - While Ran is not particularly fond

REVISIONS: Least Favorite Classes

[coolguysangel]

Least Favorite:

Defense Against the Dark Arts - Ran is terrified of horror movies, scary things, and the paranormal. As such, Defense Against the Dark Arts would probably result in her both being crippling scared to the point of not being able to answer questions. She would also get nightmares from topics discussed, as well as cry out when instructors get a little too "into" their lectures. While she would probably pass the class, she wouldn't enjoy it. (The same could also be applied to Ghoul Studies, though as it is an elective, Ran would never dream of taking it.)

Arithmancy - Although Ran seems to surround herself with geniuses, Ran herself is not an intellectual. Math is her weakest subject, and it does not mentally engage her, either. It's most likely that this class, more than any other, would require a tutor or a study-group, and she'd probably start one if she can find some kindred spirits.

Astronomy - Ran is not good at paying attention to detail unless something productive comes out of it (see: Potions). Therefore, her

REVISIONS: Third Person Sample

[coolguysangel]

THIRD PERSON:Ran heard her named called on, and it was as though all the chatter filling the air around her went to a deafening silence. She could never tell if it was just her imagination, or all of her senses honing in on her target. She remembered how Shinichi would often observe that when the time came for Ran to go up against another one-on-one, she would internalize her entire focus