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The Storm

Jul 07, 2004 02:38

Title: The Storm ( Read more... )

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jassanja July 7 2004, 06:10:31 UTC

*runs off with your icon*

shebit July 7 2004, 06:39:40 UTC

*chases you to retrieve the icon*

Mine!

*g*

jassanja July 7 2004, 07:06:12 UTC

and they just get better ;)

shebit July 8 2004, 04:33:34 UTC

Thanks.

Awww, Puss. Saw Shrek 2 last night - I want Puss.

capella_fic July 7 2004, 08:01:56 UTC

Gah, make me all weepy, why don't you?

Seriously, despite my usual reluctance to read A/L these days (my Issues) I loved this. If that's the right phrase for something that left me sniffling into a tissue. (That, of course, is one reason for avoiding A/L in the first place - if it's good I get all over-emotional, and if it's bad I want to smack someone.)

The central image of the storm was a powerful one and cleverly used. The beginning and end may have been fairly obvious choices, but I liked your decision to set the middle part at Helm's Deep, showing Legolas's vulnerability as a contrast to him 'besting' the ranger in the first section. As for the ending, with its references back to their first meeting - with such poignancy as that, you'd have a very hard time convincing me that this wasn't a slash story. *reaches for another tissue ( ... )

shebit July 7 2004, 08:24:32 UTC

Well, it might not have been quite under the three hours, but it was all written in one evening. I wrote the first section between about 6 and 7 last night, went away to do other things like watch a video, go shopping and eat, and then came back to it around midnight, finishing it around 2 - so it might have been about 3 and a half or so hours of actual sitting and writing, but with a big gap in the middle ( ... )

etherealily July 13 2004, 18:39:47 UTC

That was simply lovely. So sad, yet so fitting.

I am not usually a big LOTR fic reader - but I think you've turned me!

shebit July 14 2004, 01:30:01 UTC

Always good to hear I've turned someone.

Glad you liked it so much.

ddraigcoch July 14 2004, 17:23:26 UTC

Beautiful, honey. Soppy without being sappy. Well done!

shebit July 14 2004, 17:24:48 UTC

Thank you. My elves and Dunedain have angst. This is a known fact by any who have read my stuff.

ddraigcoch July 14 2004, 17:29:54 UTC

Elves aren't elves without an excuse to hit things. And dunedain aren't dunedain if they don't get to have a good brood every so often. A bit like a few floppy coated broody vampires actually...

shebit July 14 2004, 17:32:46 UTC

True, although Aragorn has nothing on Louis in the brooding stakes.

Thread 10

isha_libran September 28 2006, 16:43:33 UTC

I especially like the Helm's Deep bit, and Legolas's inability to understand Death--nice comparison of him to a child!

And then the last bit, with this line was wonderful: All the death you had seen was violence and pain. But this is death, too.

I also like how you used the storm as a metaphor.

Am off to read your other one!

shebit September 29 2006, 08:05:10 UTC

Thanks. When I submitted this fic to Henneth Anun it was actually the middle chapter that several of the reviewers disliked and declined it over - they really didn't like my innocent Legolas.

I'm can't now remember where the storm metaphor had come from originally, but I'm glad you liked it.