FIC: Surprise (Master and Commander, Aubrey/Maturin, PG)

[cruisedirector]

Title: Surprise
Author: cruisedirector
Fandom: Master and Commander: The Far Side of the WorldPairing: Aubrey/Maturin

Comments

[bossymarmalade]

That was great -- you got the mood and tone just right, that contemplative post-surgery haze, and their voices really right true. What a nice look inside Stephen's head and their friendship!

[cruisedirector]

Thank you so much! I fear that it's their voices in the film I was writing rather than in the books, which I gather are what most people "hear" in O'Brian fan fiction. I need to read more!

*hearts*

[astaria51]

Eeee, thank you, I've been waiting for some of this -- my writing muse has fled, but throughout the movie I was going, "stop.slashing.stopslashing! oh, forget it." This was, (like they've said) the perfect moment, and the subtlety was nice, and (I think) appropriate.

Lovely stuff!

~faye~

Re: *hearts*

[cruisedirector]

{{{vibes for muse recovery}}} Thank you so much; I didn't even try to stop slashing (other than a token, "Eeee, I'm slashing a Russell Crowe character!" that ceased somewhere around the weevils joke). But I did try to keep it low-key, at least until I can read enough of the books to do it properly.

[astolat]

*rejoices as another writer falls!*

This was just lovely -- that was such a great sequence in the film, and ripe for missing scenes to be filled in. I especially like Stephen floating in and out of consciousness after the surgery, with Jack's hand and voice there to give him comfort, and the unrecognized sexual tension between them.

[cruisedirector]

Eee! Feedback from YOU! *fangirls, does happy dance, recovers dignity*

I was playing very carefully off the restraint of Stephen's statement that he will never be able to repay the debt he owes Jack, and "name a shrub after me, something prickly and hard to eradicate" -- I don't think that happened after a night of passion, though there's a version of this living in my head where it's not the violin bow that Jack strokes to distract Stephen from his infirmity. I also think that out of a stupor, Stephen would be more likely to acknowledge sexual tension for what it is (at least movie!Stephen), and it's easier to write Jack as delightfully oblivious until he's waist-deep and sinking...

[riko]

Beautiful. Your writing is so smooth and dead-on for the time period you're recreating. Really, really enchanting.

And, if you'll permit me a little fangirl-squeal... I *KNEW* they were a couple. *KNEW* it.

[cruisedirector]

Thank you! I tried to be careful not to use any anachronistic terms but I was racing against the contrelamontre deadline and terrified I had left in some horrible anachronism.

And hee! re: the fangirl squeal. I did that in the theater when Stephen said, "You're the predator, Jack!"

[cruisedirector]

Ahh, that was my sense too, that these two were just begging for any excuse to be slashed. ("Would you call me an aged man of war?" "Are you in the mood for something more aggressive?") I am sure there will be more, as it seems inevitable. Thank you!